<Deleted User> (19913)
Wed 21st Nov 2018 12:09
Fantastic poem Meera, and a reminder of the futility of lament for things that can't be changed.
Comment is about The yellow umbrella (blog)
Original item by Meera Singh
<Deleted User> (19913)
Wed 21st Nov 2018 12:00
I love this. It reminds me of a game I played as a child, where we had to hop from furniture piece to furniture piece. The floor represented a shark infested ocean. Your writing is always so interesting.
Comment is about The Distant Sofa (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
<Deleted User> (19913)
Wed 21st Nov 2018 11:56
Glad this one's out of the box John. Bad puns aside, I agree with John Coopey... It's a moment known to many captured sensitively.
Comment is about BOXES (blog)
Original item by john short
Wed 21st Nov 2018 11:16
Hi Ray, thanks for your comment and glad you liked it.
Comment is about BOXES (blog)
Original item by john short
Hi Stu, thanks for your comments. I will get round to buying your first book via the link. All these subscriptions and competitions etc. they start to burn a hole in one's pocket!
Comment is about BOXES (blog)
Original item by john short
lovely and dark rachel. just the way i like it.
reminds me of this song. hope you get the chance to listen.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sO5APfKnR50
Comment is about sexism (blog)
Original item by nunya
written from the heart martin like so much of your work. im glad to see you still posting quality work after my extended absence.
Comment is about Ravaged (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
very nice john. sepia tinged and dripping with nostalgia. well written and evocative.
Comment is about BOXES (blog)
Original item by john short
i dropped acid and am now afraid of the color orange
i feel ya buddy
hallucinogenic and nightmarish as ever. great, loose style of writing. you need a voice to pull off poetry as casual as this and you have it in spades.
Comment is about sean penn (11/19/2017) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
i like it tom. its slightly kafka-esque and has that special quality which i can only use blunt language to relate to. its a sort of nightmare under the skin/words quality.
i look forward to reading more of your work
Comment is about Souvenir (blog)
Original item by Tom
the shorter lines work well and make the piece feel claustrophobic which is what the womb must be like. i also get comfort from the piece, again keeping in line with the theme. good piece of writing keith.
Comment is about The Womb (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
how lovely ray and i agree with martin you have a lovely rolling tongue when it comes to delivery.
Comment is about LAVENDER FIELDS FOREVER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
like this john, especially the idea of the fragrant silence between the iron rule of the tsars and the dictator. very well written.
Comment is about Анна Ахматова (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
thanks john! sorry for the late reply, i havent been posting on here as much lately as my new book is out in the new year. im glad my work resonates with you on some level. i'd be over the moon if you decide to pick up my first collection. alternatively, my new collection, a chapbook, will be available early next year. if you have twitter, i can be found @stuartmbuck and am very active on the site. again, thanks ever so much. i just popped on to post a piece i wrote a while back actually and noticed you had commented, so again sorry for the delay in responding. i look forward to reading some of your work and getting back involved with the site now i have stopped tinkering with my chapbook!
Comment is about john short (poet profile)
Original item by john short
elPintor
Wed 21st Nov 2018 02:01
A tricky situation with a greater dilemma looming large?
I have lots of ideas swimming inside, but would love for you to expand upon your own thoughts...
Rachel
Comment is about Human Jenga (blog)
Original item by eve nortley
elPintor
Wed 21st Nov 2018 01:44
I've always liked the sound of your voice reading and, just tonight, found your (maybe) unknown muse...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oNMnWTNCFSU
Listen to the beginning, and see if you agree...
PS
I just want to peek back in and say that I mean that comment in the best possible way--I mostly wanted to use the opportunity to say that I really like your readings.
Comment is about MyDystopiA (poet profile)
Original item by MyDystopiA
Thankyou for your kind comments Keith, Brian and Ray. ?
Comment is about Listening to the Blues (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Big Sal
Tue 20th Nov 2018 22:57
Hi Linda!
Again, another one worth mentioning.?
Comment is about Half-Asleep (blog)
Original item by Linda Cosgriff
A beautiful poem completely worthy of POTW. Well done Alan. As most people have said be encouraged to try open mic's again.
Nice one
Comment is about ‘Glenbrittle - the loch’ by Alan Travis Braddock is our Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
hearing you read this Ray makes all the difference. This is a wry observation of the strangeness of life. Mind you Japanese tourists get everywhere. I remember seeing some outside York minister one boxing day.
Comment is about LAVENDER FIELDS FOREVER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Big Sal
Tue 20th Nov 2018 22:45
Lavender and Tyrian are my two favorite colors of all time. So beautiful. It smells wonderful too.
I have seeds of white lavender I have yet to plant here. Maybe one day.?
Comment is about LAVENDER FIELDS FOREVER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Big Sal
Tue 20th Nov 2018 22:42
<Deleted User> (18474)
Tue 20th Nov 2018 21:39
I'm glad. I didn't think you did.
Someone who could write those first two verses couldn't.
Beno.
Comment is about My Old Beech (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
I'm quite intrigued here D. Knape. It seems to have a steely resolve, with a threat at the end. I like the repetition of Don't as it hammers home and makes a pleasant change from softy wafty poetry which can be just too much sometimes. I can't help thinking of Coen Brothers films.
Ray
Comment is about Don't Ever Forget (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Put this in the diary Don - I am commenting! This is so easy to read, as the Blues is to listen to, and the two activities compliment each other. I think you have hit the spot here. At the end it is quite plaintive. You come over with humility; but you don't need assurance from others, just do your thing mate, and rise from the ashes of self doubt (or don't, whichever applies).
Ray
Comment is about Listening to the Blues (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Ah - memories! Such a lovely use of softness and- re assurance that I say congratulations!
Ray
Comment is about Drowning in your eyes (blog)
Original item by eve nortley
Hi Trevor. This has a sort wittiness to it due to the rhyming and metre, yet certainly is a considered and serious poem and is spot on.
Ray
Comment is about Near-Death Experience (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Fantastic closing lines John. Consolidates the poem, which reads so easily and endearingly.
Ray
Comment is about BOXES (blog)
Original item by john short
Small poem, small change , but change of loyalty must start somewhere Tommy. Why not here?
Ray
Comment is about Austerity (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
If I may make so bold Ria, I would like to say that within this there is a lot of potential which may need an edit to reconstruct some of the ideas. It seems scattered and therefore confusing. I don't often comment on poems here, but please take this as a compliment (a potential one).
Ray with respect.
Comment is about SLEEP (blog)
Original item by Ria Richardson
Entrancing with its hints and suggestions without absolute revelation, leaving us in a dream Taylor. An excellent poem that transports us and at the end sort of comes home. A clear leader in your body or work I reckon.
Ray
Comment is about The Dance (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
This feels like a hammer blow of emotion. Direct and powerful.
Ray
Comment is about Ache (blog)
Original item by Megan Jones
A poem which expresses mountains of love. The word besotted comes to mind. Beautifully written and well expressed.
Thank you for this
Keith?
Comment is about Don't Say Goodbye (blog)
Original item by Kporho Raphael Oyeke
Just had to switch on my computer and reply! Thanks for your heartfelt comments which I love... as they show that the poem really works in the way that I intended! And, No - I would never cut down a tree just because it shades my lawn! Or at all, really! thanks again!
Comment is about My Old Beech (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
MC.,
Thank you for a very well considered comment to this article. There are more, of course, to follow as I look closely at several poets whose sexuality was revealed by themselves through their work. The life of Christ in particular has a certain ambiguity attached to it which is open to speculation. The disciple who Jesus loved and what we read in Matthew´s Gospel Chapter 19 verses 10 -12 provide us with glimpses of an acknowledgement of another sexuality other than being hetrosexual. To grasp this one would do well to read a modern translation of the Bible as the word eunuch can be misleading. The Book of Leviticus makes a bold statement that God hates homosexuals, which must be at variance with the creation narrative when all that he had created he saw was good.
St. Paul has a dig about homosexuals in a brief passage, often erroneously quoted but considering he was a Roman Citizen, a hetrosexual and a Pharisee one cannot expect otherwise. However, in a more generous passage of scripture he says emphatically that NOTHING can separate us from the love of God in Christ Jesus.
The use of the word gay was most certainly purloined but means Good As You, a challenge to all those who are not gay. One can hope that an increasingly more liberal climate will rid us of this awful prejudice and pave the way to genuine acceptance.
Thank you indeed for this comment.
Keith
Comment is about A History of Gay Poetry, 1: A Bare Canvas (article)
Original item by Mike Took
<Deleted User> (18474)
Tue 20th Nov 2018 18:41
You didn't cut it down did you?
Comment is about My Old Beech (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
<Deleted User> (18474)
Tue 20th Nov 2018 18:31
Oh dude! I started reading and I was loving it, loving it a lot.
It sounded like it was wrote by someone who loved this tree. Like I love my oaks and hazel and ash trees in my garden. Some one who respects the fact it's survived man's destructive capacity. Someone who appreciates how it only takes what it needs and gives back what it can.
Then it comes.
Is he weighing it up for the chop in your last verse coz he wants a nice lawn and a boarder of bizzie Lizzie's?
The last 8 words broke my heart. ?
I hate this poem now.
Great skill here, but I still hate it. ??
Comment is about My Old Beech (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
Lerner and Loewe, apparently, MC. Hermione Gingold and Maurice Chevalier.
Comment is about UP THE ARSE (1) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Brave stuff! Almost beyond the rarified stream of the poetical output..
"Blood in faeces, urine and semen...
Enough to frighten the most boastful he-men."
And - to recall more words from a favourite lyric writer:
"Ah yes, I remember it well."
Comment is about UP THE ARSE (1) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
My point is basic. The use of extremes that are clearly intended
to be taken as such - "Jabberwocky" et al - can entertain within
their chosen zone. But the intention to communicate is paramount
and that takes first place over idiosyncrasy met and employed for
a specific purpose. "Pushing boundaries" has a place but
disfiguring a great language as an intended course of routine
action in writing is not something to be applauded or encouraged.
Comic poets earn a reputation that permits their excesses but there
are limits, often self-imposed, on what is offered for "publication" -
and the novelty can wear thin in less gifted instances.
Comment is about THE WEALTH OF WORDS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks, MC. I haven’t yet chopped it up into little lines. And you might have noticed the subtle rhyming pattern of “or” (para 6) and “door” (final para).
Comment is about UP THE ARSE (1) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Laid - prostrate - by - a - prostate!
Bottoms up!!
Is this what "modern" poetry encompasses now? ?
Comment is about UP THE ARSE (1) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Did either get released on "artistic licence"?.?
Comment is about Freedom of choice (blog)
Original item by hugh
<Deleted User> (19913)
Wed 21st Nov 2018 12:13
Brilliant. For me, it's a clever portrayal of overpopulation - but like Rachel, I'm intrigued to know the story behind it. ?
Comment is about Human Jenga (blog)
Original item by eve nortley