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Wed 3rd Oct 2018 11:13

so very much deserved Jane!

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Rose ?

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Don Matthews

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 10:33

Keith

While I strive to be a free thinker and successful poet this has to be balanced with my 'acceptability' by society. I can't let my wild thoughts escape and run willy-nilly...Brian would have field day...

Don ?

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Don Matthews

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 10:26

Anya

Poems are born in the heart/mind whatever. Yes, some scream to be let out. But it is you who decides what to let out as words. You are in complete control of this, not you're heart/mind. If not, you're mind's controlling you. The 'devil made me do it' ... ?

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keith jeffries

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 09:25

Don,

Your poems begs an answer......you are a free thinker and in this lies your success as a poet.

Keith

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keith jeffries

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 09:20

Thank you all for your kind comments. Grandad was a real person. As Ray has remarked we will not see the likes of him again but the memory remains.

Keith

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Don Matthews

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 09:10

Taylor

My reason behind this piece is we are responsible for what comes out, our actions etc. We may have all sorts of thought whirling around our head but we are the ones who decide what to let out. We control our minds outlet (or should), not vice versa. Some keys don't work as they should though...

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 09:03

Love it...?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 09:00

Lovely Elle ?

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Don Matthews

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 08:59

While I be 10,000 miles away
Ya know why my mind is all gone?
That dark scary figure done scared it away
Yep, that dark scary one Maryon

You forgot my dear friends that we procreate
Our minds downunder despite being emptied
My mind it is thinking up new tricks already
(But as yet it can't think up an end-rhyme)

Oh, well... ?



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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 08:56

Loved this poem Don...the idea that we hold the key..excellent. ?

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Don Matthews

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 08:43

I like this Elle ?

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Wed 3rd Oct 2018 08:38

We used the key
to open Don's mind
What did we find?
His mind had gone
Look on the bright side
We've still got Don

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Wed 3rd Oct 2018 08:20

PERFECT!??

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Wed 3rd Oct 2018 08:17

Great poem Don!?

I think poetry comes from the deepest part of the heart where our emotions lie dormant! The mind provides the pathway for those words to be ultimately written or spoken.

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Becky Who

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 06:22

Thanks guys. This is my first attempt at a haiku. I think I could find them fun to do, but this one doesn't quite do it for me. I guess there's more to it than counting syllables. Any advice? Should we start a "how to haiku happily" thread?

Bx

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Shanice Matos

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 04:24

I love your message here. A lot of people could learn from these words, including myself.

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Shanice Matos

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 04:19

? This is so true! I’ve only racked up 4 years worth of schooling debt just to put RN at the end of my name. ??‍♀️ And it’s only noticed at work. Love this!

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Shanice Matos

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 04:10

I really love the dark mystery feeling this poem has. Whether it’s true to your life or something you’re just passionate about, it really deserves to be in a book.

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Don Matthews

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 00:42

You know what Liverpool poet Roger McGough says about haiku Becky:

"The only problem
with haiku is that you just
get started and then..."

I can understand you having a problem with slamming haiku. ?

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Don Matthews

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 00:35

The rhythm and interplay of words are great. Well done.?

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Don Matthews

Wed 3rd Oct 2018 00:29

I like the way you have expressed how you're feeling Kayleigh if not the way you're feeling. I didn't see the rhyming till the end. ?

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Hugh

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 23:52

Having been brought up in a mining community in South Wales you have triggered some historical memories.

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Kayleigh Denton

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 23:45

Thank you!

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Hugh

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 23:42

Brilliant. Corbyn should have got you singing this at the Labour Conference.It would have led to the downfall of the present government.Reading the words to the tracks while listening to the songs is perfect entertainment.Well done.

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 23:31

Thanks everybody - it's really kind of you to give such positive feedback.
From my earliest record buying days in the 70's I've always been drawn to the lyrics of songs - being hopeless with music I tended to dabble in bands but put more effort into the poetry and spoken word.
Imagine my surprise and delight that really good musicians were willing to work with me on my poems and develop them into songs and musical performances.
I agree with your comments - poetry is poetry - if it's got music with it so be it - but the basic form is poetry - it was conceived as poetry and then became something (more?) else.
So I was a bit disappointed for WOL to dismiss this work as though it wasn't anything to do with poetry.
Your supportive comments have made me feel a lot better about that - particularly coming from such clever wordsmiths as your good selves.
David - YES! The Stranglers - one of my influences definitely - got everything they've done.
Darren - glad you're liking it - seeing your own influences I thought you might.
Big Sal - yes please - do that review - let's create our own review space if the one we have is too narrow to contain us!
Taylor - cheers mate
Anya - glad you're liking it - I can't claim credit for Jerusalem - that's a Steve Earle song - my favourite recording artist - a novelist, a poet and a songwriter - who'd have thunk it? :-)
Thanks so much Ray - it's good when things come together - piano is one instrument I have major respect for but have never worked with.
Big Thanks everyone - I love ya!

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Hugh

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 23:29

An excellent description of your desperation in so few words.Well done

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raypool

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 23:06

The person you do not love obviously has a lot to learn about relationships Janey - I hope he may discover what love is. There must be a reverse side of this poem about that remedy.

Ray

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raypool

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 22:50

Just imagine that mayhem Becky. Best got off your chest, and especially in this format.

Ray

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raypool

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 22:48

Reminiscent of those 1940s Ealing films Keith still relevant today. We won't see his like again, you can be sure of that!

Ray

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keith jeffries

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 21:41

Tommy,

This is an interesting play on words which come together to form a uniqe rythm. I really like this poem as I have never seen the likes of it before.

Thank you for this,
Keith

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Tue 2nd Oct 2018 21:39

Tommy...I don't normally go for this type of repetition but this one has a lot of appeal and I've read it through more than once. Your initial unbroken format didn't grab me and your decision to change it was I think a good one.

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raypool

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 21:30

An impressive achievement Ian, and packs a definite punch in this musical form. It's clever how the words dovetail into the music; a thing I always respect as I am a pianist and a poet, but ne'er yet has the twain met!

Respect required here in every sense.

Ray

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Big Sal

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 21:06

The sample is an example of how a poem could be taken literally or metaphorically and still come out powerfully woven. Well done on it.?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 21:02

It is the truth D.K. point well made. T.C.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 20:58

Excellent track all the best with the album...?


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Big Sal

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 20:56

That's great to see music being cross-promoted with poetry. Good luck on your endeavors with it, music is always a worthy outlet to turn to, and to be able to turn that into true art can transcend the lifestyle most poets are accustomed to.

I will give a listen to this over the next couple days now that I have some free time on my hands. If you're interested, I can write a review for it after going over it a few times for a listen. I wrote a review for Taylor Crowshaw's debut anthology "Shhhh!!!! We Don't Talk About That" that is available to read on my profile page under the same name. After submitting the review and not hearing back from the WOL editor or team, I decided to release it as a blog post instead (it sold a couple copies too).

To be honest, I find doing reviews equally as interesting as writing a well-thought out poem. Something to think about. Either way, like I said - good luck.

Great cover by the way.?

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Tue 2nd Oct 2018 20:45

Top work Ian!

Like David so far I have only listened to a couple of tracks, but so far it is ACE!

Splendid.

Cheers

DJB

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Andy N

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 20:30

Thanks Darren. Pleased you liked this. Just a short tribute to a strictly one off man with three very different memories about him. Manchester won't be the same without him that's for sure.

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Janey Colbourne

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 19:45

Thanks Christine. I enjoyed your poem. I will go and visit those woods if I’m ever up that way. I’ve written quite a bit about trees and woodland myself. Some nonfiction and song lyrics as well as a couple of poems. I like to sit in the woods to write.

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Janey Colbourne

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 19:39

Thank you Hugh!

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Janey Colbourne

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 19:38

Thank you very much Jemima

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Janey Colbourne

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 19:37

Thank you very much Christine. I can relate xx

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 18:54

thanks for the kind comments on 'Bevin Boy' Stu - apologies it's taken so long for me to respond - been off the site for a couple of weeks pursuing music projects - back now :-) I appreciate you taking the time to comment
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 18:52

thanks for commenting on 'Bevin Boy' Trevor - I appreciate it - and apologies for the slow reply - been up to my neck in music project work and not on the internet
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 18:51

thanks for the kind comments on 'Bevin Boy' Keith - once again I must apologise for taking so long to respond - I've been off the internet doing some music projects - I appreciate your continued supportive comments
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 18:50

thanks for the comment on 'Bevin Boy' Becky - and congratulations on your poem of the week - sorry it's taken me a while to respond - I've been absent from the site for a couple of weeks
Ian

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John Coopey

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 17:59

I'm sure it is, MC. But a lifetime of negotiations in industrial relations has taught me that you don't control your opponents' strategy.
As we are painfully learning.
And it is refreshing to disagree with someone who does not take their bat home as a number of my fellow left-leaning WOL and FB chums do.

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Mae Foreman

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 17:59

Well said!

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raypool

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 17:21

Thanks Brian, fair comment.

Big Sal, I like to paint a picture, even a tacky one. It is really about a lonely voice in the wilderness. Thanks.

Thanks Taylor, i'm pleased you read my stuff, cheers!

Martin, for God's sake don't give that up - it adds depth to words even if it doesn't always pay off.

Jane, can I be clever? I just enjoy the thrill of words and what they can do. Thanks a lot.


Quite right Mark. There you have it. That old chestnut rhyming will always surface - it's just a tool and shouldn't be elevated above all other expression, but it's a great ally in reaching the parts. !
Thanks.

Thank you Darren, I appreciate the subtlety of your comment, a sort of stalemate, mate. And I like it.


Deeply ironical, David. You're right about metaphor, which often can be missed. Like walking down a corridor of locked doors.


Much appreciated everyone!!
John, Rachel, Jon and Anya , thanks very much for the likes.

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raypool

Tue 2nd Oct 2018 17:12

Thanks Big Sal for stepping in. This was a hard one to write, and i'm glad it made some sense.

Ray

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