Chopra,
This terse style (which I call morse-code staccato sentencing style) is very understandable.

I keep getting the feeling that it could be adapted for some
sort of (urgent style?) modern poem.

Keep `em coming.

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Sunny Chopra

Thank you for your lovely words, Julian.

I a deeply touched and proud to be a member of the Write Out Loud team.

Comment is about Poetry student Shirley-Anne Kennedy gets off to flying start (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Lovely, but why didn`t you put it into quatrains?

Comment is about Blessed Are We (blog)

Original item by oldlancsman

Marksey,
A witty, cybernetic bounce around Biblicalia.

Comment is about The iPhone of Beelzebub (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Few words, strong on content - likey v much :-D

Comment is about julia (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

An accomplished use of a poetic form in the service of your great global warning for us all Tim.

(My feet are now deservedly villanelled)

Comment is about Bigfoot (blog)

Original item by Tim Ellis

Neat - and menacingly relevant - haiku Ian.

Comment is about Herod (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

You are destined for great things, Shirley-Anne. this is a delightful, clever poem. I adore the last line, which takes me back...
We are proud to be associated with you.

Comment is about Poetry student Shirley-Anne Kennedy gets off to flying start (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Always pleasing to know one's work pleases others.
It provides the incentive and inspiration to go on.
So - go on...and gain the pleasure of pleasing yourself in the process.

Comment is about Poetry Space Winter Showcase (blog)

Original item by Anna Ghislena

An important issue that perhaps only a site like this - and a voice unafraid to ask - can address.
Parental love should never be associated with thoughts and
actions in keeping with pure sexual gratification by the
sexually aware. It seems somehow entirely logical that
such a scenario should meet no cries of outrage or
indignation if posed in a country like France - or even
Italy - where family is so much more than just a word.
In a less cruel world, such a lad ill-used by nature would
(no nod/wink intended) receive a helping hand from
others possessing an instinctive rapport allied to the
courage of human kindness in a society more advanced
than the destructive finger-pointing sort we have created.

Comment is about ANOTHER MORAL DILEMMA (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thank you Cynthia for your kind words. You pay me a real compliment. I think by 'traveller' I mean both that I don't know where home is, in a real as well as in an existential sense, and that I keep searching, and that I do so alongside other people, other travellers. Which, as you say, sometimes resolves itself in really travelling the world...

Comment is about Celia (poet profile)

Original item by Celia

I've just looked at my personal poetry blog and am astonished to find that I have written 64 poems this last year, double that of 2014.
Personally I think that is good going, perhaps a few too many.
I'm going to aim for better quality next year.

Graham

Comment is about 'Write a poem a week. Start now. Keep going': Jo Bell's 52 poetry prompts book to give 2016 a kickstart (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thank you Joe and Write Out Loud :)

Comment is about Poetry student Shirley-Anne Kennedy gets off to flying start (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks Lynn

On www.hellopoetry.com blog there is a corner for poets who have interest for the aforementioned tendency.They write things freely.No one contradicts them.By the same token they must not also be irritated when someone that doesn't buy their idea writes something that runs contrary to their interest,which has not yet got worldwide(dictionary) acceptance.

Comment is about Diffrent faces of the same coin (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

Great poem Shirley, evocative of the misty, murky cradle of the industrial revolution !! It also harks back to a time when the factories were full of workers and the 'T' word hadn't destroyed our industrial base. I can feel the atmosphere, I have pictures, real and in my mind. I remember the gas lights, just about, and my mother working in a mill, just like dad did, with fatal consequences for him !!

Comment is about Poetry student Shirley-Anne Kennedy gets off to flying start (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Ha love it!

Comment is about strangers' meeting (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

So short, so succinct, so thought provoking. A clever little poem which I liked very much.

Comment is about Herod (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Thanks you so much, both of you for such positive feedback. It truly makes a difference to how I feel about my writing when others, who know the pains of trying to put things which are kind of indescribable, into words. Get what it is that I am trying to convey. Xx

Comment is about Where I am (blog)

Original item by Jacqueline Phillips

Charlotte,
In a complete (and movingly) contrast to your `Mothers Ramble` this is pure narrative. (and - in it`s way - just as poetically effective)

One is a kind of `the way you tell èm` the other a kind of `ỳou just have to re-state the facts`

Comment is about Chinese Village - 1960 (blog)

Original item by Charlotte Peters Rock

Alem

My life is not ruled by god, the dictionary and my writing is perverse. Keep writing about what you feel is right.

Lynn

Comment is about Diffrent faces of the same coin (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

Charlotte,

I somehow missed this.

I tried reading it as a short story, but It`s stanza form and first section of scene-setting, and second section primarily of dialogue makes it a very definite - and effective - poetic account of the an increasingly emerging problem of longevity.

I waffle on a bit about the effect of the novel on poetry and I wonder if this might be a good example. It is very what the theorists call `readerly` in that it compels the reader to follow what is being put down (and doesn`t use
any `difficult` metaphor)

I particularly liked the pathos of that last stanza.

It is a real attention-holder.

Comment is about Mother's Ramble (blog)

Original item by Charlotte Peters Rock

Thanks Ray. Words came easy but a very hard one to blog. Eddie Hazel - Maggot Brain. First listen, made me stand still, was compelled to find out more. Apparently, he was told to play like his mother had just died on this track. Second listen, Mr H is a genius and plays grief on his guitar. No words could ever express what he expresses on that track. Scribble went down as I listened second time round.

Lynn x

Comment is about Frets Removed (blog)

A hugely enjoyable trip, like a yearning to know the unknowable, an essential companion to an inquisitive mind. Lovely stuff Graham.
Ray

Comment is about Stone Circle on Divock Moor (blog)

Original item by Graham Ramsden

Hiya Anita, Ive walked down memory lane a thousand fold and never tire, thank you for your comment and have a nice day.

Comment is about Anita Connor (poet profile)

Original item by Anita Connor

Thank you for the comment Stu

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hiya J.J. Thank you for your comment always nice to hear pleasant remarks. have a nice day.

Comment is about Jojomon (poet profile)

Original item by Jojomon

hiya M.C. Nice to here from you again and glad you enjoyed my piece ,I will endevour to keep you amused. have a nice day.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I connect to this very much. I feel you have a whimsical flow to your writing which I find endearing. I d love to read more!

Comment is about Despair - The Word (blog)

Original item by Isabel Hope

Aching indeed....

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

So sad.

Comment is about In the beginning (blog)

Original item by Anita Connor

Simple but I can relate to this. Should be a song.

Comment is about Her. (blog)

Original item by me.

This is a promotional picture of me for "Cordaro World", a dance concert based on the artistic struggles of painter, Cordell Cordaro.

Comment is about erin.jpg (photo)

Original item by Erin

thank you so much cathie , as you know being a writer can be lonely place and so heart warming that you like the poem

Comment is about I Have Killed My Child (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

thank you patricio (sorry for late reply) heart warming that you think so about the poem

Comment is about Paris is Beautiful (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

Why do you consider the argument a slog ?

Writeoutloud.com is a platform for promoting readership and authorship of poetry and widening horizons of thinking.

We must not confine our attention to soft issue like romance as the saying goes "Candy is dandy but liquor is quicker!"
Why do you evade answering my question to the dictionary meaning of perversion?Does the 21th century beg for a new dictionary?

I have no intention of offending people.Far be it from me harming the feelings of others.

Referring dictionaries, show me a better rhyming word with some what an equivalent meaning.I am willing to learn.

If African leaders are found guilty of despotic acts by African courts, I see no reason why they should not be held accountable.By the same token leaders from developed countries must be held accountable for the blunders they commit.
The second stanza slams democracy in the east while the first democracy in the west.I tried to be fair.No complaint has come from the east in my poetryblogs on which I posted this poem.
I am not arguing for the sake of arguing.If new trends are coming we have to redefine words and terminologies.

The floor is open for discussion.I want to hear more advice.If I am wrong I am willing to be corrected.
I am not judgemental,for the judge is God the Almighty.

Comment is about Diffrent faces of the same coin (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

The gratifyingly positive content - so refreshing when much
else can be negative - makes the occasional glitch in
spelling and punctuation virtually irrelevant...and certainly
so if read out loud.
Balm for the spirit. Thanks.

Comment is about Blessed Are We (blog)

Original item by oldlancsman

I like how you've put subtle variations into the repeated lines, and how those repeats contribute to the emotion of despair that permeates the poem. (Maybe "like" isn't the right word - it's well written is what I'my trying to say!)

Comment is about Where I am (blog)

Original item by Jacqueline Phillips

rarely get involved in these sort of tedious slogs so i will just post this and go about my day.

poem
[poh-uh m]
Spell Syllables
Examples Word Origin
noun
1.
a composition in verse, especially one that is characterized by a highly developed artistic form and by the use of heightened language and rhythm to express an intensely imaginative interpretation of the subject.
2.
composition that, though not in verse, is characterized by great beauty of language or expression:
a prose poem from the Scriptures; a symphonic poem.
3.
something having qualities that are suggestive of or likened to those of poetry:
Marcel, that chicken cacciatore was an absolute poem.

the above is not a poem. it is opinion piece delivered in order to evoke the very comments that i, sadly, am now participating in.

despite my limited knowledge of african politics (i am sure you know more having lived/living there) i do know that robert mugabe was responsible (or partly so) for the slaughter of tens of thousands of human beings. this does not mean, of course, that agreeing with one of his policies/ opinions makes you a fan of genoicde.

however, anyone who sees homosexuality as a perversion in the 21st century will come across deeply flawed to the vast majority of, shall we say, slightly more 'learned' people.

i respect your views on your country and your outlook on life but i'm afraid you must be prepared for the inevitable backlash when you post things online with the sole purpose of inciting negative feedback.

i'm fully aware that most people have an answer for everything nowadays, and that this comment is indeed an answer from myself. however, i will not be awaiting further comment on this piece, as i come to this site for poetry and feedback, not offensive Victorian outlooks.

merely my opinion mind you.

Comment is about Diffrent faces of the same coin (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

The dictionary meaning of perversion runs as follows
www.thefreedictionary.com/perversion
(It is you yourself who coined the word with the practice mentioned.It is that way I found it in many books.Hence you have no ground to complain about my choice of word.Poetry is nothing but placing the best word at the best place.)

//perversion
pəˈvəːʃ(ə)n/
noun
noun: perversion; plural noun: perversions

1.
distortion or corruption of the original course, meaning, or state of something.
"the thing which most disturbed him was the perversion of language and truth"
synonyms: distortion, misrepresentation, falsification, travesty, misinterpretation, misconstruction, twisting, corruption, subversion, misuse, misapplication, debasement
"a twisted perversion of the truth"
2.
sexual behaviour that is considered abnormal and unacceptable.
"his book revolutionized ideas about sexual perversion"
synonyms: deviance, deviancy, deviation; More//

Of course English is not my mother tongue.But I have read so many classic novels specially translation of Raduga /Progress publisher.I have read and translated classic English poems in Amharic

When I said" I second Mugabe and Museveni " I was simply referring to their stance on homosexuality.Here there is no need to politicize things.Regarding the black English man may be Museveni was mocking you!Don't underestimate him he is a witty politician.Try to get his interview on Hard Talk,BBC

Also will you not be surprised if somebody tells you something strange?
"There were white slaves in Ethiopia after the battle of Adwa."Do you believe that?

I want other poets to give comment on these issues.

Comment is about Diffrent faces of the same coin (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

lovely piece of writing martin. this idea of nature smothering what man has made is well used and the piece is so wonderfully descriptive I felt the tides splashing my face as I read it.

Comment is about Church of stone (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks for your comments Stu and Ray.

Comment is about The frog maker (blog)

Original item by Tim Ellis

thanks martin! now i have the song circling my head too!

i did write something about (the nonexistant) julia a few weeks back but then the image of the pennies popped up (maybe i should be worried...) and they seemed to go well together.

Comment is about julia (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

As the Paris climate conference draws near to conclusion and we all hope something useful will come out of it, here's yet another poem from my pamphlet.
Don't forget you can order the pamphlet from Amazon or Kindle http://www.amazon.co.uk/Speak-Unspeakable-words-overheating-world-ebook/dp/B017QBUL7M/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1449743163&sr=1-1&keywords=speak+the+unspeakable
or from my website www.birdbard.co.uk
It's very inexpensive and I've had some highly encouraging comments so far.

Comment is about Bigfoot (blog)

Original item by Tim Ellis

Brilliant article Isobel :D Aww though, I do still miss the old place. I quite liked all that peripheral noise, and the startled, bemused, or amused looks on the faces of regular pub punters as they passed through the bear pit haha. Anyhoo, will be there with bells on toneet! See thee!! :D

Comment is about Catch the choo choo to Write Out Loud Wigan's Christmas party at the Old Courts tonight (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

very beautiful lines.

I liked them the most to the end. :-)

thank you,

Comment is about Blessed Are We (blog)

Original item by oldlancsman

some great lines, references and play on words here David - I particularly liked - beggars banquets - the cock steady action - the axeman - bass players that were vicious.

snow white tans makes me think of Nights in White Satin.

There's a wonderful mix of musical influences and genres all whisked up to show how great music was before it became over produced and over hyped from the 80's on.

Comment is about Sunset on sleaze (blog)

Original item by David Addington

as David's first comment - but it reminded me of St Govan's Chapel in Pembrokeshire which can be reached down steps in the cliff just off the coastal path - nestled between the sea and land now occupied by a military firing range. Some pics here: https://www.google.co.uk/search?q=st+govan%27s+chapel&espv=2&biw=1600&bih=767&source=lnms&tbm=isch&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwjztKD74dDJAhWBTBQKHYY4AWoQ_AUIBygC

Comment is about Church of stone (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thank you.

Comment is about The Days of our cries... (blog)

Original item by Jojomon

I enjoy reading your work!
Especially this one.
Thanks for reading and commenting on my stuff.
It's well appreciated!

Comment is about Your turn (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

At first when I read the title I thought it was about John Lennon's mother and had the song going round in my mind. But it is very effective both in it's delivery and impact . no longer holding back.

fab

Comment is about julia (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck