I like this Dave. On the heels of your Atom bomb poem, I see that you are preoccupied with the idea of war at the moment.
Your poetry always makes me think - I'd really no idea that we'd only had one year of total military inaction - how sad is that - though plenty of that action probably goes towards keeping peace elsewhere in the world.
Comment is about 1968 (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
I would like to thank everyone here for the comments. They really inspire me to write haiku. I found it to be so interesting and exciting. With warmest wishes, Larisa
Comment is about Turn Around (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
I like that, Harry. Modern love ith modern enjambments.
(what has jam got to do with it?)
Actually, I did like the result of breaking the lines lke this. It sounds more thoughtful about the implications. 'He texts me' and 'I wonder' stand alone, and then are followed up after all.
Comment is about Modern love (blog)
Original item by Freda Davis
A tight piece of writing and despite its american origins I prefer 'ass' in your haiku to 'arse' as the vowel sound is short echoing 'Past' in the previous verse ( to my northern ear anyway)
I enjoyed it. XX
Comment is about Turn Around (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Andy
A luminous piece. Just one question - is the poem about just our own gallery or gallery closures in general?
I think we will press on with poetry at the next meeting. If it is our last four months at the gallery, let us bring our tenure to a glorious conclusion. And if not, let us continue our glorious ways...
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Forgot to blog this before for you guys.. typically late - lol
If the art galleries shut
If the art galleries shut
It’s not just a case of where
Would all the pictures go?
Not just a case of where
Would all of the staff go
(even though there is precious
few of them left altogether now),
or drawing classes
not being able to draw
or sketch
anywhere else.
It’s more of a case
Of it the art galleries shut
Where would you
Be encouraged
To look at life
From a different angle.
Where would people
Be encouraged to think
Outside of the box
And look at Narnia
As more than a
Haunted woodland.
Lowry as more
Than a study of Salford
In matchstick men and women
In glass bubbles,
And Munch’s the Scream
More than a storm in a teacup
But rather than a two litre bottle.
Without that,
Where would the freedom
For expression be?
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
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Tut tut - I'm surprised we didn't have an audio of you strumming...
Comment is about Compliment (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I`m glad Yvonne`s come back to this.
On a second look, the rhyme placings (plus their excellence) make it actually run better than if they had been more traditional...I
think it has to do with its modernity.
Comment is about Modern love (blog)
Original item by Freda Davis
John,
As young Steptoe would say:
`You d-i-i-rty old man!`
Either stop(or maybe continue?) taking the Allo...
Comment is about Compliment (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Clearly, a heartfelt essay into the world we
live in. I wonder if our "obsession" with
youth is a result of our failure to recognise
that each offspring is best left loved but untouched by "our" selfish attitudes that seem
into on making them mirror-images of ourselves - before they are able to draw on the widest range of human experience and the
wider world to form their character.
Your words got me thinking along parallel lines
-----
'Infants need coddling;
Kids need their cuddling,
But spare them the danger
Of mind-numbing muddling.
Instilling confusion
In innocent thought
Risks the infusion
Of quite the wrong sort -
Of two-faced pretensions
And holy-joe crap
That turn a young mind
Into a spring-trap
That seizes on anything
Which fails the test
Of another's idea
Of what's for the best;
Forgetting that Nature
Includes me and you
And anything done
In her name merely true.
Morality is human,
A manual invented
For guidance, no more,
And best circumvented
When humanity suffers
And no one's protected
If sense hits the buffers
Doing "what's expected"!'
Cheers...
...........................
Comment is about Planet of the Hates (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Zowie!! Catallus lives!!
If someone asks "Would you like a drink?"
Do you say "Just a squiff"?
And before they have a chance to think,
Do you say "Make it stiff!!"?
Comment is about Compliment (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Brilliant evocation of that transformation when the Heron takes off. I love this Dave
Comment is about David Coldwell (poet profile)
Original item by David Coldwell
Bittersweet John. I often mourn the loss of my my youthful virility. For a party trick I used to bend a half-inch iron bar over my pride and joy. Unfortunately no longer; bloody arthritis im my wrists . . .
Regards,
A.E. :)
Comment is about Compliment (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks very much, Yvonne. I'm really glad you liked it. The credit for this goes to a good night's sleep - I woke up one morning and the poem just wrote itself!
all the best
Steve
Comment is about No-one likes an angry poet. (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
Great content enables you to move the line breaks without predjudicing the outcome. I'm rather keen on mid-line rhymes, Freda, so this appeals to my senses poetically. XX
Comment is about Modern love (blog)
Original item by Freda Davis
diane green
Sat 24th Nov 2012 00:29
That was easy! But it might be worth having a gift aid form to reclaim tax?
Comment is about Please give a little to Write Out Loud - if you can spare it! (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Cheque in the post!
Comment is about Please give a little to Write Out Loud - if you can spare it! (article)
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diane green
Sat 24th Nov 2012 00:24
I have heard that there are several thousand users of this site which is maintained and developed by volunteers as far as I know. If everyone donated just £1 or more just think how much that would help to keep it running smoothly. I'd better make a little donation now I think
Comment is about Please give a little to Write Out Loud - if you can spare it! (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
How much help did the fish give you with this metre and rhyme? It's all so good, flowing from one image or concept to the next. Thoroughly enjoyed this one. XX
Comment is about Omniverse (blog)
Original item by Dave Carr
I loved this treatment of a very hot potato, Steve. I love the way the crusade gathers momentum until everyone is marching with you. This is great work -the emotion pulls you along. I like this angry poet!
Comment is about No-one likes an angry poet. (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
ah yes, memories - I had those once, (I think)
Comment is about Compliment (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
(I'm going a lot on memory with this!)
Comment is about Compliment (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
sounds great!
Comment is about A sharp eye on Manchester: performance poet's pictures (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hello Cynthia!
There is a WOL do in Sale on the 18th December. What say to this? We can come to see you there and maybe read too. How does this sound?
xx
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fellas,
I knew the song (even me, honest) But still think that into so wise and sincerely sympathetic a poem as this it introduces a slight feel of flip that doesn`t sit with the deeply felt and expressed rest of it.
(fancy making me say something like this after watching Liverpool throw it away in the last few minutes)
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
darren thomas
Thu 22nd Nov 2012 22:39
John - you're absolutely right and I stand corrected. The Drifters featured on a compilation album 'Don't Rock the Boat' - I've got it upstairs in't loft.
Harry - stand easy.
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Where did you get that notion? Actually, it was Hues Corporation who exhorted someone not to 'rock the boat, baby' http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dndAXxqJbc0
'urry up 'arry !
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z2xdCvhvyqY
: )
Fab poem Cynthia. Love the last line. Loneliness never leaves, it's just crowded out by new arrivals...for a while.
Jx
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
darren thomas
Thu 22nd Nov 2012 15:05
...drifting? The Drifters, Harry - "Don't Rock the Boat, Baby". Keep Up!
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Feelingly observational poem more genuine for remaining at a slight distance.
`for mental drive does not focus your empty eyes`...is very true and the last line is superb.
But please, please, Cynthia, get rid of that `baby` it doesn`t fit with the rest.
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
darren thomas
Thu 22nd Nov 2012 13:38
"The hours we share glow with sweet teasing"
"Did not wipe the bleakness from your shoulders".
Some wonderful lines of poetry, Cynthia. Enjoyed reading.
*not related!
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (4172)
Thu 22nd Nov 2012 12:50
Can relate to this - good poem!
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Good to see folk still taking an interest in this.
Although the poet`s question is asked directly to his God it is a fair question that could be posed to anyone`s idea of God.
If one is a stout and hearty atheist then, of course, the question never arises, but bearing in mind that the majority of the world`s population do believe in God, then outside of our own scientific provincialities (and inside many of them) the question has surely a great deal of relevance.
This question - and the other one...how possibly can an omnipotent being like God actually suffer? -caused the early church fathers (not to mention a few Roman Emperors) quite a few headaches in Athanasius` time.
If the poem ended at line eight, then it would not be a question...but an accusation.
Comment is about God in check (blog)
Original item by Marnanel Thurman
I reckon you've peeped inside my bins John so familiar seemed the contents - only thing missing was kitty's contribution of rats and mice.
Excellent new take on an old favorite. Loved it.
Comment is about Catch the Bins (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Yeah, so how come the head of the Church of England is a woman if women cannot even reach the rank of bishop???
Comment is about Women bishops swiped off the board ! (blog)
Original item by hugh
tony sheridan
Wed 21st Nov 2012 20:04
Love this!! Well done. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about NIGHTS AND THEIR CASTLES (blog)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
tony sheridan
Wed 21st Nov 2012 20:01
Nice one Hugh! Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Women bishops swiped off the board ! (blog)
Original item by hugh
This Sundays guest will be Rod Whitworth and don't forget I will be collecting £2 towards our Christmas Buffet for December. Also I'm pleased to announce Mrs Gemma Lees will be joining us at our December open mic with little Tommy too. See you sunday!
Review is about Write Out Loud - Middleton on 25 Nov 2012 (event)
Awwww - you have something to live up to now Julian!
Comment is about Niamh Jordon-Wright's haiku (photo)
Original item by The Kingsland Poet Tree
Wow, that's my granddaughter!
Comment is about Niamh Jordon-Wright's haiku (photo)
Original item by The Kingsland Poet Tree
Here here - what a pathetic outcome - good on you for writing about it!
Comment is about Women bishops swiped off the board ! (blog)
Original item by hugh
Me too....
http://www.jesusandmo.net/2012/11/21/mores/
Jx
Comment is about Women bishops swiped off the board ! (blog)
Original item by hugh
Hi Cynthia
Have recently read 'Anam Cara' by John O'Donohue and this fine poem certainly resonates with some of its remarkable content. O'Donohue certainly doesn't want us to drift.
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Philipos
Wed 21st Nov 2012 17:30
Hi Cynthia, 'The Liaison', much appreciated your views on this & I did as you suggested. Many thanks.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
If you really think that a new friend is a true 'anam cara', a soul-mate, then you risk the courage to be honest and very bold.
Comment is about Letter to a Friend (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
A Request For Extra Books
Where Is That Damn Pencil?
Two books wanted
Please please Julian
Two books wanted
For Linda too
Also for John
If I forget
You must remember
If you forget
I must remember
Then I can
Remind you to
Do what again
Oh yes that
While still registering
Inside brain cells
Write it out
On some paper - - -
Now where is that damn pencil!
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 25th Nov 2012 21:11
two old duffers beg ones pardon for late thank you for comments on 'Night walk' xx
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)
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