Soz Win, I checked Collins Concise Dictionary? Lillies plural?? x

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Ahhh Tommy, happy days eh?

I love afternoon boozing, me :)

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Hi Laura- the poem is not autobiographical- though it does resonate of days I spent in day-time bars with the sun pouring through the frosted windows of Liverpool, Dublin and London pubs. :o)

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Amen.

Comment is about Biblical Imbecility (blog)

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Thanking you Houston :)

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enjoyed the message in this and the way you have structured it,I can hear you reading it as I read it here. nice job. H

Comment is about Break The Loop (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Love it


slipping song of bubbled pebbles - mmmm

Also, like Isobel, enjoyed that identification of words and thoughts just coming to us, out of the blue

Comment is about Making the Bed (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Aww, I too love that last verse :) Would love to see you perform this too chuck - your performances are always delightful

Comment is about Now and then (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Yes Otis I'm smiling too. The subtlety i can only describe as........gorgeous. Nice one Otis, a man after mine own heart so they say.

Mike

x

Comment is about Tongue (blog)

Original item by J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)

Hi Marcia, welcome to Write Out Loud. Winston

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Intrigued by the Dublin reference. You can't be much older than me Tommy, so you would have only been a babe/child in 64, if indeed born at all.

Besides that, I really like this piece, so rich with images...the not washing, the sodden broken street, the anticipation of the 'hot' fish and chip supper. I want porter and chips now! I like the syntax used, too, in those last 3 lines.

Comment is about My loose checked tie (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Thanks Andy

What I was trying to do was to show the progression from the bullied kid who takes it with them and infects other people with it - through school, into the work place, into pubs...bullying is all around us. And it always comes back to bullies having being bullied themselves.

Anyway, ta for taking the time to read and comment, is always appreciated

Comment is about Break The Loop (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Beautiful and vivid a feeling of return resonates in each dive

Comment is about Indian Kings (blog)

Liked it on facebook Andy and things have not changed...a lovely piece indeed.. :)

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Original item by Andy N

I like this very much.. :)

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Original item by J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)

Cynthia
Thanks for your comment.

Considered your points.

The slight hesitation that the `clear` affords at that point - I think - helps.

The alliteration also helps in that it `fits` with `good going` in the line before.

The repitition doesn`t matter, there, as it did in the last stanza. (where it was spoiling the `Septembering` line.)

Alternatives to `clear` wouldn`t have sounded right, and `cloudless` without the `clear` would have been lonely.

Thanks again for your interest - it was appreciated...Harry

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Oh what a tenner bought way back..

That first line..did you lose her on purpose?

I think you did..

Comment is about My loose checked tie (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

lovely imagery.

'light stitches calm water'..'stitches' beautiful x

'entwines with leaf and stem'..that will be me on monday, in wallasey ;)

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Hello Cate. Glad you liked "Everybody's Gone Serfin'". I poached a lot from the John O'Farrell book and, of course, the tune from the Beach Boys. Still, they pinched it from Chuck Berry!

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I have often wondered about those words we can only grasp at..the ones that are so clear just before sleep..I think you capture this very well..dark words indeed..nice one Elaine..great mind thought here.. :)

Comment is about Dark Words (blog)

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ahh this is a poem I can read over Elaine..great stuff, just gonna play catch up on your other writes now...having terrible trouble with this site..sighs.. :)

Comment is about 21 Orde Avenue (blog)

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Hi Henry, Welcome to the site. Winston

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:-)

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Hi Elaine

Thx for the comments on Intercontinental drift, was writen in a hotel in London where they had the most stunning and imaginative displays of flowers I have ever seen, orchids in the lift up the walls and overhead. Amazing. Win x

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Great stuff man, good rhyming. The content's great too.

Comment is about Dominic Berry (poet profile)

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:o)

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:o)

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:o)

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:o)

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"Jolly good??? Jolly good!!!" Well said, Matron.
I suspect you mistook my efforts on "Everybody's Gone Serfin'" for singing which is why you posted "Space Junk".
You, in contrast, have a lovely voice which I hope to lull me to sleep one night!

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Hello MC. Thanks for your thoughts on "Everybody's Gone Serfin'". If you read the O'Farrell book you'll see just how much of mine was original (not much!).
I will agree that the concept of England and English would have been embyonic at best in 1066.
It seems strange the current English xonophobes would side with the "Germans" rather than the "French". Of course, they were no more German or French than we are "English". I imagine my own DNA to be quite basely prostituted!

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Thanks for your comments on "Everyody's Gone Serfin'", Greg. I am more than indebted to the John O'Farrell book. I'm not so sure it will oust The Pogues "Fairytale of New York" as the best Christmas song ever, but at least I rival Shane McGowan as a singer!

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Enjoyed very much, John.You Saxons are passe is a cracking line.

Comment is about Everybody's Gone Serfin' (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Profile pictures are taking a while longer to load for some reason. I've had the same problem. I've also found that I can't load any pictures that have been cropped or edited after they've been taken. Don't know if that is unique to me. I think it has to be Jpeg format as well.

Sorry - realise that you were addressing your comment to Winston, but I'm a meddler and I've got a better arse than him...

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So strong it brought a quiver to my chest, a sympathetic shiver. And I am at odds about the ending. Avoidance of 'shadows and dreams' is not resolution. It is a new 'mask' and, in its own cover-up, just as damning as 'his'. Moreover, I find nothing 'modern' about this situation; such duplicity has been 'forever'. I think the repetition of 'shadow' is very effective, as it implies two ideas and highlights a 'blow to clarity of all kinds'.

I do think 'African' is a bit too specific for the idea of 'outlandish hiding behind', 'covering up reality'. Implying 'native' is a dicey allusion. I don't think you intend to steer us into the murky waters of East/West civilizations, but I could be wrong. Perhaps the man in question is black, and the reference does exactly fit. If not, I think you need a different word, to be just the 'horror of a mask' meant only to conceal, perhaps unknowingly even to the wearer. And now, I shut up. Always with respect.

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Hi! Thanks for your comments on Dear Babs-love your profile pic!

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I like the 'wash' of small details that symbolize great events like 'survival', and 'love' that cannot be dislodged by hardships, strengthened even. Whatever is that 'thing' you have when you are young, that denies creature comforts and feeds instead on the gift of a book of poetry from a mystical, mythical century?

I do question 'walked'. Somehow it doesn't 'boom'. For me, alliteration doesn't save the word, even though it probably means also that you had only 'shanks mare' for transport.

Comment is about 21 Orde Avenue (blog)

Original item by Elaine

You'll forget old Perry Como
If a piece lands on your dome-o!
Fun - and not without bit of uncomfortable truth. We can forget all that stuff circling
overhead...waiting for the chance to come home!

Comment is about Space Junk (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Lovely poem Miss Lucy!Inspirational without being gushing.Well done!

Comment is about You belong to the wind now... (blog)

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This is really lovely, enlightening in concept and expressive in imagery. I find it poignant and memorable.

Comment is about You belong to the wind now... (blog)

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Chris, you are right: it is not news; it's a review feature, as the tag says.

It involves poets and photography. We all go naked when we read our words in public anyhow.

Still, I am glad you are happy to debate such things and care passionately about poetry.

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Original item by Greg Freeman

It is a pleasant poem, Harry, enjoyable. It rhymes cohesively. But, IMO, since it doesn't follow a strict metric count anyway, I would leave out some of the small words, giving the meaningful nouns more power. 'Cloudless skies' are already 'clear', so another word for a different physical sense might be used, adding more depth to the overall image. As always, these comments are just suggestions to a fellow writer who chronicled a very pleasant experience.

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Thanks for your comments, WOL friends. Children are always a spur, and the grandchildren of your own loins even more so. I marvel at the persuasive arguments of the first stanza - a kid's innate rules of rhetoric, highly effective.

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Woot woot.....move over the Beachboys... Johnnys just been good!!!! Very good!!!
Cate xx

Comment is about Everybody's Gone Serfin' (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Absolutely brill.

Comment is about Everybody's Gone Serfin' (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I wrote this in September when a six ton chunk of space satelite was heading towards us. Thankfully, we survived! And may I thank the Little Green Men for backing me on this track! ;)

Comment is about Space Junk (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Surely everybody has heard of the Fat Duck - or else where do you all get your snail porridge from?

Comment is about A Quarrel (blog)

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:)

Comment is about There's an App (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

'an icelandic expidition
to investigate the fish and
so improve the world's nutrition'

Only you could come up with rhyme like this Dave :) A cracking performance poem and a hilarious read. x

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Original item by Dave Carr

An enjoyable read - and a great title too.

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