wasn't sure what way this was going to go, Cythnia - always a good skill..

enjoyed this a lot.. nice one x

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

lot of power here, Georgina for a short poem.. would like to see more in this style as i think it suits you well..

excellent stuff! x

Comment is about These Days. (blog)

Thanks for the comments on 'Chaos'. The title is from an interest in Chaos Theory - and some 'poetic licence' taken in applying it (loosely!)to human relationships;and the picture is of a fractal - interpret as you will ;)
Cx

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thanks for the comments on 'Chaos'. The title is from an interest in Chaos Theory - and some 'poetic licence' taken in applying it (loosely!)to human relationships;and the picture is of a fractal - interpret as you will ;)
Cx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Yep - agree with Ann - last verse not needed; I would also lose one of your shells in the 2nd - or replace rather.And who would miss or mourn? ... well small deeds or actions by every single, solitary soul can have a chaotic impact on many others - I can get quite caught up in chaos theories :)
Cx

Comment is about Near Death (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

It's weird really,isn't it?What we do for the pursuit of pleasure!Liked the bit about the car containing your life,and the panicked feeling of death being almost upon you.The bit about the spirits of sea-faring men dragging you out to join them,lost at sea is another good bit of imagery.Sod's law-seems to prevail whatever we do,wherever we go!Are you sure you'll do this again?

Comment is about Near Death (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Thanks Anne, looking at it now you're probably right and I might well do so - will sleep on it and look again tomorrow.

Comment is about Near Death (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Aw ta Lynn-no pets at the mo-(except one called woofy the wife)I keep her on a very short lead-lol! we lost Pepe four years ago-now I am a registered dog walker at the local refuge-and sometimes 'borrow' Skip the patterdale off wifeys friend-I will put a 'Pepe' poem on tomorrow-and we can sniffle together!until then-au revoir lovely Lady-Stef-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi again Larisa-thank you very much for reading and kindly commenting on 'Truer than true' I really appreciate it.I am also enjoying all your lovely poems too-thanks-Stef-xx

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

It's amazing how often some little accident does mess up a special moment and at last someone has written a (very good) poem about it. Well done Cynthia.

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Good for you!!

Comment is about surfing (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Wow! How exciting Dermot! I was well and truly riveted! I'd lose the last verse though. It is such an exciting poem that I think the last verse is an anti-climax. And, yes, I have just done a seafaring poem too! ;-) (As you well know!!)

Comment is about Near Death (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

I've just done a seafaring one too

Comment is about surfing (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi, dear Ann! Thank you very much for your comment on my romance "Don't go away". Ann! I am just touched. Your words really encourage me. I'll try to tape another Russian romance and would like to hear your opinion. And the main point is: it's not the question of my voice but of the words in this or that romance. With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Dear Ann! I am just touched. Your words really encourage me. I'll try to tape another Russian romance and would like to hear your opinion. And the main point is: it's not the question of my voice but of the words in this or that romance.

Comment is about Please, stay with me! (Russian romance) (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I really like this, Ann. The rhythm of the short sentences really do capture the sadness of the story, but also add a simple conversational tone. Beautifully written.

Comment is about a childhood (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

When you're in a hole stop digging Stef! The lady has a lovely Marlena quality! Right, now I've told HIM off I'll say I found this very moving Larisa. xx

Comment is about Please, stay with me! (Russian romance) (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I liked this a lot Cynthia! It surprised me, made me laugh, made me think. Not bad for a semi-sunny summer Sunday! x

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

More gloom and doom from down beach!

Comment is about surfing (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

That is one fabulous woman in the photo. You should run scared. Any man will be annihilated.

Comment is about Persephone's last laugh (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

A little something light and frothy on a semi-sunny summer Sunday afternoon.

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I like this Alison, and it flows nicely, not only with the rhyme, but also with the repetition of the words 'If you can' and 'And'.

Comment is about If you can ... (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Yes, Stefan, you are right, as McCoy is really gorgeous. And when I go out with him everyone admires him not me.

Comment is about McCoy (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi again Lynn-I know what you went through losing Max-very tough isnt it? I felt same over our Pepe-the Yorkie!hope Max isnt chasing him round doggy heaven-lol! I did a poem for my Yorkhire 'terror' as I him-put it on later-Thanks Lynn-Stef-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you Lynn

I glad I'm doin it for you... Thank you so much for reading and making comment I'm very much encouraged.

Gus xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hello isobel


many thanks for your well thought through critique... you are getting warmer.. you have to wait and read the book ....one day...

Hope you are well hope to see you soon

Gus xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Good afternoon Dave-very grateful for your apt comments on 'Truer than true' hope you and yours are well-catch thee later pater-Stef.

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Cynthia You know I'm far too shy and polite to tear you to pieces ... the very thought!!


Thank as always for reading...

Gus
Xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Lynn-do you own a dog food factory by any chance-it must have cost you a fortune to feed all these recues doggies along the way! think I ,ll rename you St.Winalot-lol! shame Charlie did,nt work out for you-but at least you tried-well done on that score-someone will take him on I,m sure. thanks Lynn-Stef-xx good luck Charlie!xx

Comment is about Charlie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Beautiful dog Larisa! what a sight you two must have made,walking out-never seen a dog like McCoy before-as Lynn says-gorgeous!thanks Larisa-xx(McCOY-xx)-Stefan.

Comment is about McCoy (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

What a beaut Max was Lynn! and for that matter,still is,in memory without doubt.I,m no expert when it comes to breeds but am I right in assuming he is Collie-or was he crossed with another breed? he really has a lovely look on his face.And of course once again a pat on the back to you for another rescue(oh go then and a biscuit-beg!beg! lol! rest in peace Max.-best regards Lynn-Stef-xx(Max-xx)ps.love that line-'now I look for your face in the stars'really nice-SW

Comment is about Our Max (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Cynthia

Maybe this should be moved to a discussion thread. You've highlighted one of life's apparently insoluble dilemmas, which is of particular importance to those aspiring to write. To what extent should one subordinate the negative to focussing on the positive?

I don't have an answer and would be genuinely interested in what others have to say. For myself, (and I think others) I feel a periodic compulsion to write down words which express what I am gripped by. It is something to do with 'being real' (that may sound pretentious I know). Sometimes it is 'positive' sometimes it is 'negative', and a mixed diet does seem to express reality/life/the universe or whatever we call it.

I suppose there is a type of negative poetry (sometimes seen on WOL) which sets out to disturb people for no good purpose. But that can be avoided, can it not?

Comment is about Angst (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

'where once was dressed an idol, older
no longer the desire to hold her'

What cheery lines for us 'grandes dames' of the poetry world! LOL

There is much to enjoy in the rest of the poem though and I like the realism you have injected into it. Very few relationships manage to escape the cruelties of time and familiarity...

Comment is about a pilgrimage to L'Oréal (blog)

Thanks for reading and thanks for the comments, it is much appreciated. I have left a slightly longer comment on the poem itself as to interpretation.
Cx

Comment is about Shoeless Carole (poet profile)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Thanks for reading and thanks for the comments, it is much appreciated.
Cynthia, with most of my writing I hope there are layers - that's the way my mind works - things relate to each other in both an obvious and obscure way. I like word play, and thought play, and lateral meanings - it can be as obvious, or as deep, as you want it to be. I think with a lot of poetry the interpretation belongs to the reader, not the writer; as here - both Francine and Carole have seen different things.
Sometimes, you are quite right, I am literal and obvious, and I use poetry to try to cope with, or make sense of, things that are getting on top of me - sometimes people relate to that, sometimes they don't. But whatever my frame of mind, or my intention, or my meaning when I write something, is irrelevant to how the reader will feel about it, so why does it matter whether my intention was to be deep or literal? I am a multi-faceted person, I endeavour to make my work reflect that, sometimes it works, sometimes not.
Cx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

ya! thanks L'Oréal

Comment is about a pilgrimage to L'Oréal (blog)

Mmmm... Some wonderful imaginative lines in this Peter.

'And he must taste
Fresh lilacs second skin
Like Lycra fits hips unforgiving in allure
so curves open like a chord'

'An internal wave of passion
In an opera of tenderness
This stage is a landscape
And I drape over you
You are my flavoured gloss'

'he has become
nothing more than mulled wine'

'this paper spine is torn.'



xxxxx

p.s. I love the title, but did you mean L'Oréal? Seems to make more sense then ; )

Comment is about a pilgrimage to L'Oréal (blog)

Hi Cynthia, thanks for the comment on 'stone I own' as usual I'm never sure about posting stuff, also it looks different when you post it, I would like to take guidance on punctuation etc. I dont normally punctuate, with this one I did and its no good, so ill go and edit. I have recently been joining different poems together just to try somethin new, it may head towards a cut up idea, just to keep fresh. I seem to have lost the desire to shout at moment its all Love n stuff. Bestest . Pete xxx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

McCoy is Chinese crested

Comment is about McCoy (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

It's so sad that you had to part with Max.
Even on the picture he looks so intelligent.

Comment is about Our Max (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Aww, McCoy is just GORGEOUS!! Larisa, thanks so much for kind comments on my doggy poems and photos. What breed is McCoy? It's not one I recognise, but love his beautiful coat. Warmest wishes, Lynn xx

Comment is about McCoy (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Nice poem, Lynn. When I saw your dogs I decided to add my McCoy for a company. lol
With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Charlie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi, Lynn! It looks as you also like dogs and Benji is so sweet. How do you like my McCoy?

Comment is about Benji (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

HI Cynthia. Thank u for commenting on my stuff. i tried not to overload it with meanings and images but maybe i didn't succeed. Actually i'm just from Steve Waling's workshop and it gave me some new ideas. I posted new poem written at the workshop as well

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thomas, I logged back in to tell you I think this is terrific. Like all the other readers, I am one who never passes over your work (as you know). It rings with originality and honesty, like looking at an exposed soul whose feeling are expressed with finesse. I like your depth, and your imaginative observations. And your titles.

Comment is about The Sea At Night Does Not Rest (blog)

Original item by Tom

In the spirit of discussion as we might have around a table with beer and sandwiches, I contend that the 'four anxiety clusters' (I am well aware of them) are probably the most negative words to introduce the most negative attitudes to life that I have ever experienced. If a person didn't have angst before, he/she would definitely develop it after being introduced to these self-help 'psychological' ideas. Who freely discusses 'joy' and 'positive revelation', the building up instead of tearing down?
This is a good poem, Dave, for sheer controversy, the 'Plato' thing.

Comment is about Angst (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Go for it, Attila, as Dylan T advocates. And millions of others. There's no middle-aged stigma anymore, except what you put in your own head. Enjoy. I have yet to learn chess; good for the gray matter, yes?

Comment is about Too Much Pressure (blog)

Original item by Attila the Stockbroker

Great sustained metaphor. I enjoyed this, funny and precise.

Comment is about Off the Hook (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Pete, I think this is fabulous. Your images are simple and weighted with meaning; diction is particular for sound, visual effect and significance; individual lines are like Haiku moments. If anything, I didn't think it needed punctuation at all, leaving the reader to sink or swim. The title is excellent, loaded with suggestion.

Comment is about The Stone I Own (blog)

This is really good, all of it: slippery and provocative. I like the capitallized Beauty and Rose, as Hayden says, redolent of Classic expressions full of included meanings. The title is superb, the 'outer skin' and the 'inner seed', very novel, loaded with implications. I never pass over your work now. I may be off the wall, you know, interpretive-wise.

Comment is about Orange Peel and Apple Pips (June 2008) (blog)

Original item by Heather