Got to say Mae I'm with everybody else on this, I like the shanty version but I prefer this one, and, "Dip deep in your hole ridden pocket," is inspired.
J. x
Comment is about Satan's Ark-A Sestina (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
The, "Promised land." Now there's a misleading term. Quite right Mae that people are sold a fake, a dream, and for so many it becomes a nightmare. Love this.
J. x
Comment is about Hades' Ferry- A Sea Shanty (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Certainly stimulating for its challenge to this sort of "extended
abbreviation". I confess to being lost after "G". I suspect that
others may be in the same position - which rather defeats the object
which is, I imagine, to put over a message of defiant unity. As it
stands, it seems nothing more that a confusing jumble of letters
that is hardly likely to co-ordinate sympathetic attitudes.
Comment is about LGBTQIA+ (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
There is a really quite selfish pleasure in solitude. I enjoy the times when I can step away from the crowd and the noise and the relentless bombardment of life and enjoy peace, tranquility and solitude. Sometimes the only way to heal is to see ourselves and the only way to do that is without distraction.
J. x
Comment is about The 21st Century Paradigm (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
No, I don't think it was either ambiguous or obscure, it's just lovely when each time you re-read something, you pick up something new. I love the layers.
J. x
Comment is about The Benefits and The Perils (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
And he's back! Hope you are doing well.
Excellent poem. Very moving and so true. That at verse was haunting...
"And in that final time, when he asks,
Fix him with a gaze both firm and steady,
Aknowledge that he has, "Other tasks,"
And calmly say, "I'm ready."
It actually stirred a muffled little sob.
Thank you Jason ?
Mae
Comment is about Walk The Paths Well Trodden By The Brave (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Yes, at the end I realized it was all a bit ambiguous and obscure, I'll admit that! But all in all I'm quite happy with it!
Thank you Jason ?
Mae
Comment is about The Benefits and The Perils (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
dk you are a silly boy
Why ever are you out
In car at rush (oops slow) hour anyway
What are you all about?
I thought you were retired?
In prairie-country house
Far away from all those cars
Feasting on some grouse......
Comment is about Cars & Bikes & Scooters (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Just love this Mae, "Even numbers can be cruel." I've had to re-read it five times to pick up all the little nuances. Clever.
J. x
Comment is about The Benefits and The Perils (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Sat 27th Jul 2019 12:21
My mind went down
a one way street
I was hit head on
by an idea
but now I am being ticketed
for operating a poem
without poetic license.
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
Original item by Don Matthews
Trouble is you'd need a hard-to-find decoder to work out what the title is all about. POTW Judges have told me titles need to be of the fluffy/flowery type....'Shit I'm Feeling Terrible' doesn't qualify.....They'd need a PhD to work LGBTQIA+ out.....
Comment is about LGBTQIA+ (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Sat 27th Jul 2019 11:18
Thank you Keith for your comments much appreciated. Thank you Rose for the like. Must say I’ve found life’s got better as I’ve got older, could just do with younger bones that don’t ache.
All the best des
Comment is about Younger bones (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Desmond,
An epitaph for those of us who have seen better days. Once firm we now sag but with hearts still full of love.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Younger bones (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Even the title of this piece is thought provoking. I like your emphasis on the silence . It can be a killer depending on which way you may consider it. For some people the silence can be so unbearable even for a few moments. For others long periods of silence are sheer bliss. I personally vacillate between the two points.
I get exhausted with the continuous and sometimes endless babble that come out of some individuals as well as groups of individuals and or institutions or dare I say it government bodies who will speak endless amount of drivel in specially coded soundbites to attract news hungry press in this wonderful information age in which we currently live. Truth is a double edged sword in which we only ever here what is considered to be the worst or best according to somebody's opinion. All of which draws in the very voyeuristic tendencies of the voyeur.
all of which puts me in mind of Orwell's ministry of truth and newspeak.
But suffice to say and excellent poem Rachel
Thanks for posting
Comment is about truth or dare? (even no answer is an answer) (blog)
Original item by nunya
Your thoughts are always welcome, Don.
But I never really had any doubts as to the true literary merits of my tome. I eagerly await POTW at the very least. Maybe even the Pulitzer Prize.
And thanks for the “Like”, Jason.
Comment is about LGBTQIA+ (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Me again John
Jeez you gotta watch who's creeping up on you these days. I've only just noticed the P boat myself. Some funny bugga. Think nothing of it. Probably some newbie wanting to steal your thunder. Like many newbies - here today gone tomorrow. Only old dogs like us plod on. The boat'll probably sink overnight. Don't worry......
Comment is about LGBTQIA+ (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
John
Have just realised I misled you. The person I was referring to as having written this 'shitty ditty' was he who wrote the 'shitty ditty comment' and attached my pic to it. I would NEVER John refer to
your work as 'shitty'. I have a pure heart.......
Comment is about LGBTQIA+ (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
‘Ey up! I’ve just noticed in my picture that someone’s added a “P” while we weren’t looking. It’s not for “pigfun” is it?
Comment is about LGBTQIA+ (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Au contraire, mon repos. This is entirely my standard, Don.
But nevertheless, Hello.
Comment is about LGBTQIA+ (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Nice and lovely Keith.
Indeed love need one another to exist.
Comment is about A Flame never extinguished (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Indeed they are beneath yet exists.
Good one.
Comment is about Beneath the Surface (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Shitting in ladies handbags
Makes me sorta spew
(Now that is more acceptable)
Than what you gonna do
Putting things in context
It takes more practice, skill
To brownie in a handbag
Than do a sickie spill
Who wrote this shitty ditty?
In gutter he did stoop
It's not his sort of standard
To write this shit, this poop
(Nor mine....who attached my profile image to it?)
Comment is about LGBTQIA+ (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
"Tears out my soul" True.
Superb!?
Mae
Comment is about kind of blue (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Devon Brock
Fri 26th Jul 2019 22:30
Thanks Lisa and Dorothy, it's the first thing I've written in a little while so it's much appreciated.
J. x
Comment is about Walk The Paths Well Trodden By The Brave (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Piles and piles of papers with scribbles and doodles
Comment is about WHERE THE BEST OF POETRY EXISTS BETWEEN THE LINES (blog)
Original item by trevor homer
Beautiful Jason.
Comment is about Walk The Paths Well Trodden By The Brave (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Adam, I think both. The specifics of some memories will in time "whisper away" but THE memory will forever stay.
Comment is about Next Bed Over (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Love this Josie!
Comment is about The Future Has Been Cancelled (blog)
Original item by Josie Harris
Thanks to all who took part in another wonderful Write Out Loud Woking open-mic poetry night at the Lightbox last night. Despite the heatwave! It was great to hear Karen Swaley deliver an extended set as our featured poet, and to appreciate the range of her work, and her developing talent. We’re very proud of you, Karen! Other highlights included Connie Froeze – sadly, her farewell appearance before she returns to Germany. Remarkably, Connie says she prefers to perform her poetry in English, because she thinks of the subjects in English, too. This month’s two debutants were Elliott Msindo, from Farnborough, who gave a powerful and confident performance, and Tony Demoncy, a previous attendee of one or two Woking Stanza group sessions. We welcomed back Amel Oudjida, Louise Blake, Adam Gary, and Afon Claerwen, whose poem about Hiroshima – the anniversary is on August 6 - was moving and emotional. Thanks also to regulars and always fine poets Pete Jardine, Peter Taylor, Andy BJ Low, Anna Molesworth, Eddie Chauncy, and Karen Izod. Where would we be without you all? Indeed, where was Rodney, my co-compere? Sunning himself somewhere, hopefully at a somewhat lower temperature. We did have noise issues in the second half with the comedians upstairs, but understood that they had to keep their door open because of the heat. We’ll excuse them just this time. Thanks also to Gillian Freeman, who passed around the cap at half-time for donations to the Lightbox. It’s a wonderful venue, the Lightbox. Some people travel a long way to perform here, and we’re very pleased and proud to be part of it. Our next open-mic night at the Lightbox is on Thursday 29 August, when our featured poet will be Pete Jardine. See you there!
Review is about Write Out Loud Woking on 25 Jul 2019 (event)
Leon, thank you so much. What a wonderful compliment.
Mae, many thanks to you as well. Someday I will try those structured poems you all are working with now. Great job.
Dorothy, thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
While I read and comment there is a home made curry simmering away Trevor. It will be a nice cut and dried experience with an immediate reward. Your excellent poem reveals other layers of the undefinable consequences of the rags of old considerations seemingly important. Yes I'm sorry to ramble. Sometimes I want to take over the shooting match. Its seems that you can hover between realities so easily giving a great guidance to the normalities and the edge thereby.
The final lines really do justice to the poem as ultimately it is dust to dust. I can't help but read grim humour into that. Please keep 'em coming.
Ray
Comment is about WHERE THE BEST OF POETRY EXISTS BETWEEN THE LINES (blog)
Original item by trevor homer
I can relate to this. I must have thirty or more journals full of half beaten ideas, story lines, and tidbits for poems. Every so often I will pull one out and think..."wow, what was I thinking?" Thanks for sharing. I enjoy reading poems easy to read and understand. Especially those I can relate to. ?
Comment is about WHERE THE BEST OF POETRY EXISTS BETWEEN THE LINES (blog)
Original item by trevor homer
I am reminded of the other day in the garden feeling low about one of the myriad baboon-assed fuckeries being perpetuated by my country's dung-tongued thugs when I decided to see the world through sweet-pea colored glasses as those flowers in the light shone with hope.
Comment is about Shit! How I Hate This Damn Phrase (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
A market needs a supplier and when the costs of living vary so much
across the world, any market is worth having. By the way, I note
that India - a vastly overpopulated country with grinding poverty
that it seems to accept as normal - is busy launching rockets into space. Their "values" are a matter of speculation when considering
how much "guilt" should be felt when purchasing products from
their sweathouses. Social mores over there are somewhat different
to our own and "conscience" does not seem to enter into their way
of thinking at all.
Comment is about The fabric of society (blog)
Original item by eve nortley
I have long loved Leonardo but through your lines have learned.
Thank you.
(my comments do not always come out alliteratively)
Comment is about Leonardo da Vinci (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Great poem Adam! On the question you asked I feel the memory lingering like a spectrum type impression while the person is slowly slipping away! Sweetly so! Loved it!
Thank you?
Mae
Comment is about Next Bed Over (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Outstanding Lisa!???Well done!
Mae
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Hi Adam! Thanks for reading! Lovely rhyme you whipped up there! Of course you plan by choosing the words! Just make sure that you have something to say. Which I'm absolutely sure you do! Good luck, I'll stop by your profile and take a look!
Thank you?
Mae
Comment is about I Loved And Loved- A Triolet (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
<Deleted User> (17847)
Fri 26th Jul 2019 12:35
Enjoyed the stepping down Lisa. Love your versatilities
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Well-said, Wolfgar. Sometimes juxtaposing cultural practices creates interesting effects. Best, RG
Comment is about her parents (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Devon Brock
Fri 26th Jul 2019 10:52
Adam, I don't think this poem needs punctuation. It has a great rhythm that will stall if punctuated. This is just my opinion, of course. "Converse All-Stars high topped and rainbow". Dang Brutha! This poem moves seamlessly through flat societal expectations to an exuberant throwing off of shackles. I could see her flipping the bird and whistling down the way. So does this poem and it's title work? Yep.
D
Comment is about At Noon (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Ray, an intriguing insight into the past - an enjoyable reflective odyssey. If we hang on long enough we may be back there again. And besides I'm getting bored with all the derivative shit masquerading about the place'. Blind following the easily led I say! Keep on keeping on.Trevor.
Comment is about SCHOOL HOLIDAYS IN THE FIFTIES (blog)
Original item by ray pool
elPintor
Fri 26th Jul 2019 10:44
..reminds me of a scene, listening to a mother explain why she had purged some of her deceased son's belongings from her home, saying that she couldn't bear the way objects lose his scent...
Quite poignant and so is the writing.
Rachel
Comment is about Next Bed Over (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Thanks to everyone else for the flowers
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Hey Tom. I didn't think I had a poem in me at the time. I think we can all relate to falling in and out of love. Not just with a person, but with anything in our lives.
Adam, perhaps I should have put hand rails up. Some of those steps down are pretty big.
Thank you both for the comments
Comment is about Falling In and Out of Love (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Thanks again, jennifer and trev
Comment is about 'Log In*' by Laura Taylor is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thanks Jennifer, it's been a bit of a difficult couple of weeks, really sorry I didn't thank you before. Ironic that this one should become quite relevant to me, as I wrote it before my Dad's death.
Time really does exercise its own inevitable power of attorney.
J. x
Comment is about Atrophy (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 27th Jul 2019 16:45
Fab photo on your bio. Terrific bio too. Interesting how, in the small version by each entry, the picture looks entirely different, like two glowing eyes.
Did you ever read 'The Naked Ape'? Could well be eons before your time. But, maybe not.
Comment is about branwell kent (poet profile)
Original item by branwell kent