Excellently captured - IMO - layers deep in intent. The opening line/expression with the accent is superb, setting a superb 'tone'.
Comment is about SPARROWS CAN'T SING (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Good one, really good one! Full of punch, and a fabulous ending.
Comment is about Another hot night (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Very apt metaphor, and an intriguing last thought.
Comment is about limpet (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
And proud of it! Always a good sign that 'better' things lie ahead when you can whack nonsense together for the sheer delight of it.
Comment is about The Queen of Mundane! (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
For his greatest accomplishment was convincing he is not real, when in fact its your kind hearted soul he is here to steal... The worries and struggles we face each day are because of his tribe he sent our way..
Remaining positive is the key for our souls to in fact be set free.. Love and light to you all
Comment is about Devils domain (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Please put £1-50 in the Old Man's Hat
if no money I O U notes not accepted
because all mine keep getting rejected!
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Fancy trying something different?
During second session
piece of paper
is passed around
if you want
to know more
come on down!
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Very interesting. And honest. I applaud honesty!
For me: 'I am, therefore I write'. I have to write. And such a poem then exists for itself. I have no logical explanation.
Sharing is always a bonus, via written WOL or on a 'mike' evening - especially performance which allows more personality to be involved, from poet and listeners.
Comment is about Poetico Ego Some (blog)
Original item by mike booth
Sorry Trevor. Seems they didn't think of you when they hit the wall ?
Comment is about Rhymer Club's Collapsed, Kaputt (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Good morning and thank you, too, David. Hope you dont mind me borrowing a line from Scotland's national poet! John
Comment is about Synaesthesia (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Saturdays aren't good for me - I always seem to miss the Rhymer Club, and only see it on Sunday. ?
Comment is about Rhymer Club's Collapsed, Kaputt (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thank you Martin and a happy new year to you! John
Comment is about Synaesthesia (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
HOW TO SHOP FOR SHOES:
(A lesson for women)
Enter St. John's Market
15:30 hours.
Locate shop-
walk up to shoe rack-
choose shoes-
pay at till-
Exit St John's Market
15:37 hours...
NEXT WEEK: How to 'Tell a Joke'
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Thanks Ray for your comment re "Then 19". Your Generosity of Spirit is most welcome.
Tommy
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Doug for your comment re "Persephone" it's most welcome.
Tommy
Comment is about Douglas MacGowan (poet profile)
Original item by Douglas MacGowan
Thanks Cynthia for your remarks re "untitled". I forgot to leave one and once you commented upon the fact I let it lay. Give me a title and I will oblige.
Tommy.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thanks Martin, for your comments re "Come and See". I found the pacing difficult and several attempts were posted, even after your post l changed the end positions of 2 lines... Plagued l am already!
Tommy
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Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
Indeed MC.
Thanks Martin, high praise indeed.
Comment is about Come and see (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Big Sal
Sat 12th Jan 2019 02:19
Big Sal
Sat 12th Jan 2019 02:19
Hope the New Year is a good one for you JR.
Be well buddy.
Comment is about J R Harris (poet profile)
Original item by J R Harris
Big Sal
Sat 12th Jan 2019 02:08
Very powerful take on 'reincarnation' or simply the idea of 'rebirth' itself. A veritable defender of such a title. Well done on this.?
Comment is about kill me. (blog)
Original item by marzipan666
Big Sal
Sat 12th Jan 2019 02:06
As always, you reading is appreciated immensely.
(Nice sweater by the way.)
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Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
Po I turn on the light every night. and Thank you all.
Comment is about Words of The Waiting Man 26 (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
A truly beautiful poem with a great rhythm and a marvellous passion about it like so many of your poems.
Nice one Tommy
Comment is about Come and see (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
There is some really inciteful lines here Keith as well as a good degree of wisdom
Nice one
Comment is about Wisdom (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
There can sometimes be a very fine dividing line in relationships which I can never fully understand. You seemed to have captured this well here Robert
Nice one
Comment is about Situational Insanity (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Those last three lines are particularly good and round the poem off very nicely.
Comment is about Words of The Waiting Man 26 (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
Is every dog a reliable critic? If so maybe I ought to get one. Animals can be quite discerning creatures.
Comment is about The Critic (blog)
Original item by d.knape
I don't where this is Alan, but Keith is absolutely right with this. It certainly makes me want to be there where ever it is.
Nice one
Comment is about When I am Rich (blog)
Original item by Alan Travis Braddock
What memories this poem evokes. I had at least two friends who had a C.V. I remember they had amazing suspension. Legend has this was to allow French farmers to be able to transport chicken eggs across bumpy fields and tracks with breaking them.
Marvellous poem David
Comment is about The 2 CV (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
An absolutely beautiful poem John. The words flow wonderfully in both rhythm and pace. I also love your reference point of Iron and wine. I am also fan of his music.
Nice one
Comment is about Synaesthesia (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Thank you Keith. We went there for 3 years in succession but I'll never be able to live there. So really this is just a dream. Oh well , can't win them all.....
Comment is about When I am Rich (blog)
Original item by Alan Travis Braddock
<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 11th Jan 2019 22:50
The cockney feel reminds me a bit of 'If it wasn't for the 'ouses inbetween'
Comment is about SPARROWS CAN'T SING (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I suspect that there is more than element of truth in this poem and very nicely read Ray. It's good to still hear any sort of local colloquialisms that have not become metropolised. ( Not sure that it is a word) But I am using it anyway. Although said words and phrases themselves would not doubt have been seen as bastardisations of the mother tongue.
Love it Ray
Comment is about SPARROWS CAN'T SING (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Childlike yet profound in its evocation of how we each move ahead
- following the path laid before us in life.
Comment is about 'I pawed away from the trunk, fumbled, and took my first step toward not returning' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Indeed. Let no man cast a shadow where there ought to be light -
unless that shadow offers shade from heat that burns too bright.
Comment is about Come and see (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
I like "the stem of grass in the teeth" ruminating feel of these lines.
Maybe you should really worry if your dog moves close and cocks its leg!
Comment is about The Critic (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Keith, I too have a memory of that ! It went during the fifties. Thanks for your reading.
Hi Brian, my wife still talks of a hottle bottle, but now I know where it comes from. I would never have known that character, so thanks!
Thank you Taylor. I read this out on Monday at an open mike, and a lady asked me to forward it to her, so really chuffed.
Po, Quite right and thanks for that.
Good of you to drop by, Jon and Anya!
Ray
Comment is about NANNY'S HOT WATER BOTTLE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Just to say thanks for your likes, Anya, Don and Po.
Ray
Comment is about SELL EBRITY (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I don't have no luck with no women
They all pass on by when I ode
Perhaps I should take your advice dk
And get a dog I can offload ?
Comment is about The Critic (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Big Sal
Fri 11th Jan 2019 20:02
Oh there's plenty wrong with me, but nothing that can't be solved with the companionship of a good piece of poetry.
The yin/yang of this makes it one of your best. A metaphysical walk through the park, if you will.
Comment is about The Critic (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Big Sal
Fri 11th Jan 2019 20:00
Nice title, and I love the last line, Lisa.?
Comment is about Devils domain (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
A poem which takes the reader along with the poet every step of the way on such an idyllic description of a much loved place.
Thank you for this.
Keith
Comment is about When I am Rich (blog)
Original item by Alan Travis Braddock
Fri 11th Jan 2019 17:22
damn. 1932?
you look good for 87.
i wish i looked as debonair as you.
what has this got to do with poetry?
nothin'.
but it's the best I could do.
wink.
Comment is about Alan Travis Braddock (poet profile)
Original item by Alan Travis Braddock
No News is Good News
That is the theme
to find out if true
bring a poem or two
start off by pressing the bell
side door entrance only
answer it's only me
if told a password change
it will be for the new year
if told mad as a hatter
and the door opens enter!
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Poignant words, Tom, tenderly expressed.. Sorrow can bring out the best of poetry in the gifted - unfortunately. I expect that this is no consolation - but it may help at the time.
Comment is about December 24th Notebook Pieces (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Big Sal
Fri 11th Jan 2019 13:20
Great last line.?
Comment is about Words of The Waiting Man 26 (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
Big Sal
Fri 11th Jan 2019 13:19
Don't feel bad, I started going bald when I turned 18-19. Bad genes or good cheese?
The world may never know.?
Comment is about Going Bald (blog)
Original item by d.knape
M.C. Newberry
Sat 12th Jan 2019 16:00
I've no doubt that there are many creators and performers who think critics are dogs! ? Or, as someone observed, critics are people who can tell you how to get to a place but don't know how to drive.
Comment is about The Critic (blog)
Original item by d.knape