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kJ Walker

Sun 9th Sep 2018 19:29

Thanks Anya, Taylor, Don, and Brian.

I was one of the working class lads in this story. we really believed we could fly, and came so close to achieving our dreams.

Yes even the lowly can fly, but not very far it would seem

Teachers sometimes used to put down the most vulnerable kids, like any bully they liked an easy target

sorry about the length, I don't have the ability to get my stories out in a few words. this one is actually brief compared to some of my others.

Glad I was able to keep you interested

Cheers Kevin

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Martin Elder

Sun 9th Sep 2018 19:29

I sense your frustration and the passion behind what you are writing by the fact most of al I suspect nobody is actually listening to you even when you are present in company and speaking. The desire to be alone can be just as strong as it can for some to want to be in a crowd. But I agree with David in that it might be helpful not to totally isolate yourself . Take care


The poem is excellent both in words and format. I look forward to more

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Martin Elder

Sun 9th Sep 2018 19:18

I love the honesty of your poetry as much as the humorous side to what you write. May your frustrations be few my friend


Nice one Don

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kJ Walker

Sun 9th Sep 2018 19:15

Hi Jennifer
Nelly was my sister, Hoggy was a mate of my dad's. My dad was as bad as Hoggy, because he stood as watched when Hoggy kicked her dog. Had her concentration not been broken, I'm sure she would have smashed his head in.

glad you enjoyed the story.

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Martin Elder

Sun 9th Sep 2018 19:05

Peter I can see a distinctive style that you are developing here with your writing that draws the reader. I think this is as much to do with the fact that many people can so easily relate to what you write in a pleasant gentle and easy way. This is no exception in its familiarity of an ordinary British church grave yard.
I look forward to more


Nice one

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Martin Elder

Sun 9th Sep 2018 18:56

I have to say this one of the many reasons that I don't use facebook . Well said

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Martin Elder

Sun 9th Sep 2018 18:37

This definitely has a quite a scary hint to it. very well written. I love the repeat of silence has a new name tonight.

Nice one

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Tapashree Roy

Sun 9th Sep 2018 17:10

Thanks Sal for your encouragements! ?

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Peter Taylor

Sun 9th Sep 2018 16:50

Many thanks, Taylor and David, it's great to get your thoughts.

I think, David, that you have identified exactly the meanings behind our actions and rituals re our deceased; and am grateful for your wide-ranging and admirable insights into other faiths and civilisations (which I have picked up in many of your poems and comments).

Taylor, again huge thanks for your time and words that get the feelgood factor flowing for the day.

Peter T

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John Marks

Sun 9th Sep 2018 16:46

Conjoined in dream - a resolution devotedly to be wished for Peter. Puts me in mind of Robert Browning's poem 'Andrea Del Sarto' from his 1855 collection 'Men and Women' and, particularly,"Ah, but a man's reach should exceed his grasp, Or what's a heaven for?"

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Big Sal

Sun 9th Sep 2018 16:07

It's (data farmed) been sold countless times to companies and governments, helped sway elections the world over, suppress dissident speech, all that stuff George Orwell warned us about all those years ago.

Different hoods with the same masks, and another great piece from your way.?

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Big Sal

Sun 9th Sep 2018 15:59

That's funny stuff, but nah nothing too dicey. I got the pen name from a portmanteau of the first two rap names I had when I started back in high school.

Not my best work, but someone had to do it.

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elPintor

Sun 9th Sep 2018 15:22

Monologues can be exhausting. It's natural to expect others to join in, but they don't always.

The term "self-actualization" comes to mind, here. I hesitate to expand too much, but you may find it an interesting concept anyway.

Rachel

PS
The formatting definitely does lend an element to the piece that might go unnoticed in its absence--very thoughtful.

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elPintor

Sun 9th Sep 2018 15:07

Like lemmings to the sea...

Maybe we are built to be blindly tied to the machinations we create and set loose, like subconsciously planting logic bombs to later set our destiny free.

..just a thought.

Rachel

PS
For the sake of clarity, I share the concern you've expressed.

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d.knape

Sun 9th Sep 2018 15:06

thanks Don
for having the courage
to read my poems
i don't know how you do it
or why.

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d.knape

Sun 9th Sep 2018 15:05

Thanks for that extra word .
Now we are up to TWO.

smile.?

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Don Matthews

Sun 9th Sep 2018 14:13

Brian - Bet you're hanging out to hear my voice. It could frustrate you further ?

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Sun 9th Sep 2018 13:59

Love the message Hasmukh!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 9th Sep 2018 13:59

My daughter read this and said bluntly, 'You're a little scary yourself, you know, Mum!' (Always good to keep your kids on the hop. HaHa!)

Thank you to the 'likes' on the flower - much appreciated.

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Sun 9th Sep 2018 13:56

Don firstly I never expected you to look like your picture!

Secondly - I am also extremely frustrated, but we won't go into it here...

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Sun 9th Sep 2018 13:51

A very good rhyming poem Kayjay and a good story that kept me interested throughout.

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Don Matthews

Sun 9th Sep 2018 12:38

I liked this. When I see a long poem I don't usually begin as I'm afraid of falling asleep halfway. This one kept me captivated to the end. I liked the changes as the tale went on and the surprise ending. Liked the use of cos. Just cos I do. ?

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HayzTee (Hayley)

Sun 9th Sep 2018 12:29

Thank you. I wrote it in paragraphs at first, was an old memo to show doctors about how it feels (description)
I thought I would pay arpund with it to see if I could put it into a lot visual and poetic way ?

It's the most painful thing I ever have had to regularly go through. Hopefully one day I'll be free of it haha

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Taylor Crowshaw

Sun 9th Sep 2018 12:09

What a story Peter just wonderful for a Sunday morning. Thank you ?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Sun 9th Sep 2018 12:07

Just the ticket Hugh....?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Sun 9th Sep 2018 12:06

How many of us suffered the put downs from our teachers and amounted to something..of course all of us.....excellent ?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Sun 9th Sep 2018 12:01

Well described Hayley..good piece..?

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jennifer Malden

Sun 9th Sep 2018 11:46

Really lovely story as usual. Was your sis Betty or Nelly?
Liked the rythm.

Jennifer

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Mrinmoy Dey

Sun 9th Sep 2018 10:20

@DOOMTASTIC Thanks maam. Glad you enjoyed it.
A mother knows that in life, her little ones will face so many struggles! Yet she can't keep her close to her breast. She has to let him go. The little ones have to learn life the hard way as there is no easy way either.
Have a good day!
Cheers

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John Marks

Sun 9th Sep 2018 09:57

Thanks David. Faery it is!

John

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John Marks

Sun 9th Sep 2018 09:56

Thanks Rachel. I wont!

John

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Sun 9th Sep 2018 09:28

loved it Larisa!

take care my gorgeous Ukraine friend






Rose ?

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Sun 9th Sep 2018 09:23

great piece of worded artwork Hayley!






Rose ?

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Don Matthews

Sun 9th Sep 2018 08:57

Anya -The concept was to vent our frustrations in poetry to aid healing ?

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Mark Mr T Thompson

Sun 9th Sep 2018 08:41

Thanks Don... I often write Haiku, and quite often write a number of them on the same subject (the length really seems to fit well with my thought processes) but I had never attempted to string them together like this. Haiku with glue you might say!

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kJ Walker

Sun 9th Sep 2018 08:19

Top notch. I enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme.

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Sun 9th Sep 2018 08:18

Don't take it personal please John. I was expressing an opinion held by many, possibly the majority in the country as shown by the Brexit vote.

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Gopal Gupta

Sun 9th Sep 2018 06:50

Very nice

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Marie Alyza

Sun 9th Sep 2018 05:37

Thank you for the feedback on my poem "How Late Is Too Late?" I'm glad you like it! ♥

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Don Matthews

Sun 9th Sep 2018 05:31

I like this very much Mark ?

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Don Matthews

Sun 9th Sep 2018 05:19

Twisted neck
Latin 'torticollis'

I saw the dagger
I saw the blade
But could not feel
Your crippling pain

Poetizing the dagger
Poetizing the blade
I hope relieves
Some crippling pain

D ?

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Erin Renee Moore

Sun 9th Sep 2018 04:08

I really enjoyed this. Very well written. I like how you described the mother bird as "teary eyed" personifying her relationship with her young and letting him go on his first flight. People take for granted how similar we are to animals.

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elPintor

Sun 9th Sep 2018 00:44

..a great comment, John, to go along with a finely written tribute to the strength of these women. Don't ever stop writing about the things that matter.

Rachel

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Don Matthews

Sun 9th Sep 2018 00:26

I like it too dk. Especially last line ?

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Don Matthews

Sun 9th Sep 2018 00:23

Well done. Skillful use of words and rhyming. Perhaps you should put your hand up for rewriting the Book of Ecclesiastes. ?

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John Marks

Sun 9th Sep 2018 00:22

cheers! j

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John Marks

Sat 8th Sep 2018 23:31

Your man-on-the-Clapham-omnibus, Brian, was a Fascist, xenophobic ejit - in my opinion. I do not write for him or her. But, thank god, that man has now fallen off said omnibus and his/her place has been taken by a person who does have the faculty of empathy (maybe because s/he is a refugee him/her self).

j

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Sat 8th Sep 2018 23:16

The man on the Clapham omnibus cannot relate to what is going on in the middle east. All he hopes is that it won't result in thousands of refugees landing on our shores. (This applies equally to omnibus travellers in Worcester, Guildford etc)

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raypool

Sat 8th Sep 2018 22:42

Thank you all, Peter, Taylor and Marie (welcome).

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Janey Colbourne

Sat 8th Sep 2018 22:26

Thanks Taylor and Hayley!

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