Wow wow wow!!! I love this poem

Effective rhyme

And love these lines
Raise me up like if to drink

Just to bouyant to ever sink

eyes too wide to ever blink

My body creased to your fold

Such hyperbolic metaphorical lexis here

Comment is about Pining (blog)

Original item by Erin Renee Moore

A lovely poem.... Effective structure, repetition and parallellism...

She speaks loud-

But has no voice
.
This line is really clever in portraying idea of no strength or vindication in the words she speaks

Comment is about She Speaks (blog)

Original item by SheSpeaks

This is a really sweet sincere well written poem.... With good effective rhytyhm and rhyme

I like how it starts with your wish.... Then ends in wish of the deceased
Well done

Comment is about I wish (blog)

Original item by SheSpeaks

The power of this poem is in the unusual but effective structure that build excitement... Urgency and tension...... And the narrative style

And lol

Nothings changed..... Still the guys at weddings.... Christenings... Will go watch footie in other room

Comment is about WORLD CUP 1966 personal recollections (blog)

Original item by Maggie Waker

Lovely imagery in this poem.... I slespecially like the personification of troubled thoughts....

Where remains of distressed thoughts hung

Decaying yet diminishing as troubles often do


And personification here
Tender plants pausing


And here ......
Cold icy winds pruning brittle stems



Very powerful poem

Comment is about Resurrected (blog)

Original item by Maggie Waker

Hurdles and Pains slept with me,

I know, some day I shall be free.
Beautiful , roy. I loved it.

Comment is about Journey to the Light (blog)

Original item by TROY

@becky who Thank you ?

Comment is about Mundane (blog)

Original item by Eric Fox

Just beautiful well done..?

Comment is about LONELY (blog)

Original item by Kporho Raphael Oyeke

I love the phrase 'the sweetness left after it lovingly falls' I love nothing more than being inside with the rain pattering against the window pane. Lovely poem..?

Comment is about After A Rain (blog)

Original item by d.knape

Great title to a great piece.?

Comment is about Journey to the Light (blog)

Original item by TROY

Art finds itself
surrounded by poetry

Poetry finds itself
surrounded by art

Comment is about Dmff7rLXgAIvS6N.jpg (photo)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Exactly Big Sal it is one of a collection I have written for my grandchildren...thank you...?

Comment is about Don't Be Jealous Of My House (blog)

Original item by Taylor Crowshaw

It's poems like this that initially inspired me to write "Pressed Flowers". Coming on this site and seeing enjoyment, entertainment, and the occasional euphemism, I was able to see that my time was better suited for now in writing poems for kids and teens alike to relish reading once again instead of focusing all my energy in trying to keep the attention of or impress adults or peers.

Even if that wasn't your intention with this, it still came out with its own cloak. Sounded much like a Grimm fairy tale.?

Comment is about Don't Be Jealous Of My House (blog)

Original item by Taylor Crowshaw

Well done Aly, well deserved poem of the week..congratulations..??

Comment is about ‘Triptych #1: Coffee, Paper, and Storm’ by Aly is Write Out Loud’s Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by steve pottinger

Wow. This is powerful. I think a few people could recognise themselves in this, if they read carefully enough.

Comment is about Mundane (blog)

Original item by Eric Fox

Thanks. Someone proposed it as a "Tree of life" form, with strict syllable counts - I thought I'd give it a try.

Comment is about Silhouette (blog)

Original item by Trevor Alexander

Love it Don, upbeat rhythm and rhyme. Just the thing for a wet Monday morning...?

Comment is about WOL Colosseum vs WOL Fun Bus (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Thank you, Marin, for commenting on my poem. Much appreciated. With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Some time back Elle I wrote in a personal correspondence that the future was female; the future was Asian, l stand by that.

Tommy

Comment is about the future is female (blog)

Original item by Elle Shaine

Gorgeous and very relateable

Comment is about ‘Triptych #1: Coffee, Paper, and Storm’ by Aly is Write Out Loud’s Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by steve pottinger

Thank you Sal for appreciating Heal and for liking my other words.

Cheers,
Taps

Comment is about TROY (poet profile)

Original item by TROY

Thanks, Daren and Marie for sharing your appreciations! ?

Comment is about Shushhhh (blog)

Original item by TROY

Congratulations Aly!

Comment is about ‘Triptych #1: Coffee, Paper, and Storm’ by Aly is Write Out Loud’s Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by steve pottinger

Lovely - a fine choice for POT and a nice way to start the week.

Great stuff!

DJB

Comment is about ‘Triptych #1: Coffee, Paper, and Storm’ by Aly is Write Out Loud’s Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by steve pottinger

Brilliant! Great poem.

Fantastic slam! Thanks for putting the video on - it was great to see/hear, really well delivered.


Cheers

DJB

Comment is about Make-Up Wake-Up (blog)

Original item by Becky Who

Brian

Creating good rhymes is not easy
It's more than just Jack and his Jill
It's not just 'bout gladiatorial battles
I'ts not just 'bout who'll do the kill

Why is my black humour coming out here?
Infecting this nursery story so?
I think I betta go and start over
Spread some fun seeds around, let them grow ?

Comment is about WOL Colosseum vs WOL Fun Bus (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Very different from you Trev.

Good tree shape!

Comment is about Silhouette (blog)

Original item by Trevor Alexander

Elle - why aspire to everything men can? Have we been so brilliant down the years?

Comment is about the future is female (blog)

Original item by Elle Shaine

This is a protest piece at some of the things I saw when first entering WOL. My response was to form the FUN BUS. ?

Comment is about WOL Colosseum vs WOL Fun Bus (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Don we're not sadiator
You're not a gladiator

God, you've got me doing your rhymes now!
???

Comment is about WOL Colosseum vs WOL Fun Bus (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Excellent!

Comment is about Follow Me (blog)

Original item by d.knape

Love this Don! ❤

"I'm not here to write blood and gore
I'm healing myself, doing more"

....yes, doing more of the good stuff! Wonderful!

Comment is about WOL Colosseum vs WOL Fun Bus (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

I like the poem Elle, but I believe the future is together not alone.

Thanks,

Jon

Comment is about the future is female (blog)

Original item by Elle Shaine

Hi Martin, Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts. I very much agree with the spooky feel around the lines. So glad you liked it.

Taps

Comment is about Shushhhh (blog)

Original item by TROY

I'm not quite sure how to take your meanings here Elle. You are not crazy. You. like me, might have a bit of mix-up-in-head at times but we are not crazy. Put yourself up on our screens whether we like it or not.

I can see your plea for women to take their proper role in society but I disagree with your line 'women can do anything men can'. Women can do some things men can't (even better) and vice versa.

The future doesn't lie in one gender alone Elle but a blending of strengths of both. A give and take. Was it Shakespeare who would say 'Aye there's the rub' ? Bard experts help me here...

You are not crazy
But the future is bigender
Sorry Elle

All that aside I liked your poem. ?

Comment is about the future is female (blog)

Original item by Elle Shaine

Excellence once again.?

Comment is about year of the jackal (blog)

Original item by nunya

Every stanza imbued this piece with a more diverse layer and more soul each successive time. Well done Lynn, it came out sounding great.?

Comment is about CHITTER CHATTER...SHHH (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

Like a scene out of a Guillermo del Toro film mixed with a hue of Tolkien. ?

Comment is about the fawn (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Face Book? What's that? ?

Comment is about Follow Me (blog)

Original item by d.knape

Yes I also liked it Lyn. A perfectly chosen title ?

Comment is about CHITTER CHATTER...SHHH (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

Martin - Here you see my Serious. Elsewhere my Comic. They often play together but this time Serious has the whole playground. I'm glad you like the two sides of me. ?

Comment is about Frustrations (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

I enjoyed reading this so much I've read it five times! Added you to my favourites. Thank you for sharing.

Comment is about CHITTER CHATTER...SHHH (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

Thank you all for the kind words I truly appreciate it and look forward to reading your work as well!

Comment is about She Speaks (blog)

Original item by SheSpeaks

I love the imagery on this poem. Thank you for sharing.

Comment is about TIME CAPSULE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Lynn,

This is a lovely piece with superb control and authority, a lesson in balance between opening a door just so and leaving it ajar for the reader to find his or her way through it.

Whatever, I enjoyed reading it.

Peter T

Comment is about CHITTER CHATTER...SHHH (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

lovely poem, Ray, you written in like seaside rock through and through. I guess a complaint because the death was recent, hinting perhaps at violence or maybe illness at a young age?

An intended enigma......?

Great stuff, thank you.

Peter T

Comment is about TIME CAPSULE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks David, you're not wrong.

Nice to get the likes: Starfish(welcome), Rachel and Anya.


Stay well !



Ray

Comment is about TRANSMOGRIFY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Reading your poem is a bit spooky to say the least Peter, for the reason that yesterday I penned one on the subject of reading gravestones. I intend to put mine on in any case, but your take on the subject has a broader and more detailed rendering. There is lots of rumination and consideration of life's questions which you do so well. If some readers consider the two as a sort of pair it would show how different minds reveal themselves, quite exciting from my perspective. Your poem is to me like the slow drawing in of a nice pipe of tobacco(which suits me but alienates others!) My effort is called Time Capsule.


Ray

Comment is about A CHURCHYARD VISIT (blog)

Original item by Peter Taylor

Your poetry definitely has a bit of an edge together with a rhythm all of its own. I can't help this one in particular would work well as a song . Either way it would probably work well read out aloud in an open mic setting


Nice one

Comment is about Pop Songs (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Excellent love it...?

Comment is about Frustrations (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews