Thank you :-)

'and Morecambe weeps' - lpvely even in it's heavy sadness x

Comment is about Richard Alfred (poet profile)

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Guest poet: Penelope Shuttle

Review is about Buzzwords on 1 Sep 2013 (event)

A measured, balanced response, Alan ... with "Some plankton-brained hack is on a hackneyed quest" one of the most resonant lines for me!

Comment is about No Carol Ann Duffy? Write a poem for the little prince (article)

Original item by Julian Jordon

Loving your stuff Dave - makes you think, which is the whole point of this, isn't it?

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Many thanks Dave, I work in the journalism profession and have had, in the past, to tolerate Mail sympathisers, so my heart goes out to you. But cheers for the kind comments.

Comment is about Offend a Daily Mail reader - today! (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Looks like baby George will have to write his own bleedin poem. It's called I don’t want it

I miss that muffled bass beat,
the soothing heartbeat
that pulsed about my
lazy warm malingering
before I got expelled.

Crikey! – I’m absolutely shattered -
All that traumatic clattering
and clamour, It’s hardly glamorous.
But lo and behold how the bells do ring!
that herald a baby’s plight to be king.
They’ve already got it in for him .
Can’t even put up a fight, poor thing.
Apparently it’s hereditary. . . .
Oh shite – it’s me!

It turns out I’m third in line to the throne – Well I knew
this had to be Britain, I’m already in a queue.
There’s this complex hierarchy, and this here new kid
is born to be the lid on the pyramid.

Well,
I don’t want it
I want tit.
I want to piss and shit.
I want to gurgle and posset.
You can keep your sycophantic adoration,
and all your republican vilification,
and your obsequious infant adulation.
I just want instant gratification



Some plankton-brained hack is on a hackneyed quest
about ‘bottle or breast - What’s best for the kiddy?’ It’s
obvious to me - I’m surrounded by idiots
with all the language of praise and contempt to conjure.
Call me national treasure, or benefit sponger,
or prince, or parasite. The nation is torn.
Look - This is your crazy planet - I’ve just been born.
I can’t figure this archaic construct out.
I don’t know if I’ve come up trumps or lucked out.

No,
I don’t want it
I want tit.
I want to piss and shit.
I want to gurgle and posset.
You can keep your sycophantic adoration,
and all your republican vilification,
and your obsequious infant adulation.
I just want instant gratification.


So when the gushing and fawning and fuming and spite
is over, and the last plaudit and insult’s been hurled
Ask yourself
What’s blue and green and covered in parasites?

I think you’ll find the answer’s - The world.

Comment is about No Carol Ann Duffy? Write a poem for the little prince (article)

Original item by Julian Jordon

great poem. I like the Queen but I see the world as you do in this poem. Never mind royalty, we each have our blame.

Comment is about 369 000 (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

I like the rhythm of this peace, it sends me thinking forwards.

Comment is about Instar (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

Nigel so sorry to have missed your comment! When is the next WOL meeting I could bring some copies then?

Comment is about Anna Percy (poet profile)

Original item by Anna Percy

Another very strong poem, Katy. Raw and gutsy. Lilith is a fascinating figure, understood in many different ways. It would be interesting to hear your take on her, although it's fair to ask whether there is more than one Lilith.

Comment is about Instar (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

It's one of the sadnesses of my life that there are Daily Mail readers in the family (so I do get to read it occasionally). It's particularly annoying that it includes odd bits of good journalism along with all the subtle brainwashing, peddling of indignation and skewed, prejudiced reporting. Anyway, it deserves every word you've written Marksy. Thank you.

Comment is about Offend a Daily Mail reader - today! (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Love poem to my hands

paint speckled
with white gloss
matt purple nails
hills and valleys
rounded fingers
5 ravines
type me a lovesong
bend touch teach me
show me evidence of
scalding water
talk to me of life
bend me a riverful
point me to joy
paint me a number
lie still
push my buttons
talk for me
cover my face
place my crystal earrings
sleep for me.

Comment is about You've got the whole world in your hands (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Good fun and clever. Canals are wonderful.

Comment is about Pidgin poem about wondrous canal lock (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Hi Harry - glad you like my praise poem :) I think it will be a good one to warm up an audience...

You are right about how we react differently - and there are just no female flashers. In fact I'd love to set loose an army of them on the London Underground, just as an experiment - all shapes, ages and sizes - I'd love to see the expressions on men's faces. I'm guessing that no-one would feel threatened or alarmed by it though...

Take care - hope to see you soon. x

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

http://poetneerajtyagi.blogspot.in/

my new blog on poetry

Review is about The Shuffle on 27 Jul 2013 (event)

I like your poetry rhyme or free verse. Many of your poems make me smile, not moan. In these times we need humor in our lives.

Write what makes you feel good.

Shirley

Comment is about The Rhymes They Are A-Changin' (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hello Harry,
My "Footle Poems" are not great, but thank you for your nice comments. Footle poems are supposed to rhyme but who says a person has to follow the rules. Write what makes you feel good.

Thanks again,
Shirley

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Hello M.C.
Thank you so much for your encouragement. I do like this short story, "So Very Alone." I have an even longer version which is a little more descriptive.

Thanks,
Shirley

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Historically (Saxonly) good!

Comment is about Eggy bread (blog)

Original item by Gareth Glyn Roberts

M.C.

Just got back from crazy, mixed up, multi -cultural London where a white guy gave me his seat on the tube and a black guy did similar at Victoria Station - you must be psychic!

(I must share this: They`d set up a boxing ring in Victoria Station for one-round bouts and I saw a young girl (yes girl!) give another girl a whopping great black eye...honest!)

Life is a dance alright!

Comment is about THE RACISM ONE-STEP (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Aw,
You`re just tryin` to fighten us!

Comment is about The Rhymes They Are A-Changin' (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Shirley,

So this is `footle poetry`!

I`ve been thinking of thinned down down stuff like this as an attempt to strip the clutter of `scientific` rhetoric from some of the wonders that go on around us. (my canal lock thing)

The two syllable - two line form is interesting but - paradoxically - might be too restricting.

Does it always have to rhyme?

Thanks for enlightening me.

Comment is about Footle Poems (blog)

Original item by Shirley Smothers

Dave,

Nice `reminder` one.

(Lord, lord, take me!...but...er...not quite yet!)

Nice to hear death mentioned, it`s not much talked about in poems these days.

Comment is about Death (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Tom,
If you want her back you can`t tell her that you`ve noticed all those other fish.

Comment is about You & Me (blog)

Original item by Tom Doolan

Isobel,

Look forward breathlessly to your forthcoming

`HYMN TO PENILE BEAUTY`

(Why is it that the girls always laugh at a naked feller while -vice versa - the lads all go quiet?...
It`s humiliatin`)

Love the rhyming...and what a chorus!

Comment is about Beautiful (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks, Greg, I have put all those links on the Guardian webpage.

Comment is about No Carol Ann Duffy? Write a poem for the little prince (article)

Original item by Julian Jordon

You need fingers ...to make hands .....

PLEASURE.

A single finger, a pleasure bringer
Stroked up and down the spine.
It’s your single finger, that pleasure bringer
You’ll find the spine is mine.

© By: - Pete Slater. 2013.

Comment is about You've got the whole world in your hands (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks for commenting on the flashers of old London town.

I'd agree with Graham - that's a lovely profile pic. x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for your comment on my poem Francine xx

Comment is about Francine (poet profile)

Original item by Francine

Oh - you must have been more beautiful than me then - it only happened to me once - thanks for the tip though ;

Comment is about Beautiful (blog)

Original item by Isobel

No problem Kath, I for sure like your poetry :)

Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Royal baby poems already up on Write Out Loud include

Steve Pottinger
http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=38087

Laura Taylor
http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=38064

and Jan Oskar Hansen
http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=38073

Apologies to anyone I have missed out ...

Comment is about No Carol Ann Duffy? Write a poem for the little prince (article)

Original item by Julian Jordon

Thanks very much for the kind words, Simon and Greg. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed the poem. :-)

Comment is about 369 000 (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Outstanding poem, Steve, reaching out across the world, beyond the little Englanders. I loved these lines particularly:

"who ride the long trains north in the night
running the gauntlet of gangs, police, La Migra
who slip across borders soft as water
on blistered feet"

and these lines, to strike fear into any Daily Mail reader:

"who are coming now,
an unstoppable future."

Comment is about 369 000 (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Cheers for the kind comments chaps! Loving your works too.

Comment is about The Template of my Being (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Brilliant. Love the soggy bran flakes!

Comment is about Angry Autumn (blog)

Original item by David Blake

Thanks Steve.

For me the problem seems to lie in the fact that wherever in the world power shifts to - economically those people born in mud huts seem to have the same lot. And I think it will take a whole lot of change before their own governments start to prioritise welfare...

I'd agree that we all need to have that dream though and I love the way you have explored that common humanity in your poem.

Comment is about 369 000 (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

simplistically fabbo!x

Comment is about Hurt (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

platinum!x

Comment is about The Template of my Being (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Loved this too. An interesting piece.
Starfish

Comment is about The Template of my Being (blog)

Original item by Marksy

Fantastic. Loved reading this.
Starfish

Comment is about Offend a Daily Mail reader - today! (blog)

Original item by Marksy

This is powerful stuff.
Starfish

Comment is about Every Veterans Hair is Turning White (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Gets the thumbs up from me :p

Comment is about Eggy bread (blog)

Original item by Gareth Glyn Roberts

Some good Twaikus coming through, now. Just one thing - remember to follow HeatonsTwaiku, so you can see your own Tweeted works.

Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Some very nice Twaikus uploaded, Nigel... you are quickly getting used to the limits of the form.

Comment is about Stockport Write Out Loud to give arts trail a reet tweet (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Finally gave it a titty :-)

Comment is about Hurt (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Superb! Been waiting for some pertinent and meaningful comment on a certain birth and you've done it!

Comment is about 369 000 (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Hi Isobel!

I'm really pleased you enjoyed the poem, but I'm always really nervous about explaining what I've written. *deep breath* OK... the line 'who dream, as we do' is there - after the list of what their lives may hold for them - because we all, rich, poor, 1st & 3rd world, have dreams. Common humanity and all that.

The final two lines are intended to mean that the future, demographically, lies with the citizens and the cities of the developing world. Power and population are shifting away to new centres: China, Brazil, India etc. I suspect you may have taken that who to refer to the we in 'as we do'. It doesn't!

Hope that helps. :-)

Comment is about 369 000 (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Hiya, thanx for your comment on Purple Skies, hope you're enjoying WOL, like this poem by the way, best wishes Jeff

Comment is about Spring (blog)

Original item by Starfish

I read your comment before I read the poem and didn't imagine I'd like it as much as I did.

I love it though - it's wonderful poetry - strong, powerful and beautifully written.

I'm not sure I get the last two lines though. They seem to represent what you would like to happen rather than reality. Or does the 'we' refer to you and other protesters rather than those people born on mud floors?

Comment is about 369 000 (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger