Oh Rachel.....still laughing here, well done you I read it a few times and nuffin jars for me..can't wait for the performance and it better be on the 15th lol and yes they still have the venue at La Gondala too...I had a bit of batman but gave up..hold on a mo..

You thought the 60's
one big party,
an exploration
of sexuality, rarely
did you grim revenge
the night.


You can see why I gave up lol..x

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OOz this Narafo then? Google just refers me to some stella fella.
...and another thing....
women??? stubborn??? where do you get that from?

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Hi Larisa, really enjoyed reading these. (I'm a bit slow catching up because I broke the screen on my laptop!) These are funny, and I have to agree with Stef's comment about not knowing what to expect - and like you, I don't always know where mine are taking me either!!
Love, Lynn xx

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Agree with all the comments, Terry, I enjoyed this.

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ste, i am a big fan of polly..i went to college in warrington where duffy did her music studies. i dont know what they taught her cos that coke advert was abysmal.

peter kay,paddy and them are ok but they dont look like vernon, swoon.

thanks guys x

ste the market is pants. they do sell pants, big belly warmer variety.

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laura how could you say that of our vernon, he is a cheeky cherub of the north ;)

yes jeff is far too busy dogging lately to bother to read my poems ;D

yeh last verse doesnt fit in...i might lose it. i should dedicate a whole different poem to my pakistani boyfriends really. all i can say is they were very keen and the white guys i know are just not (wxept jeff who is always keen to go up to rivvie :D :D

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No worries - hope you enjoy it :)

I did my first open mic at just about this time last year, and SHIT myself. Then couldn't sleep when I got home because of the massive buzz :D

Careful now, you might just get addicted to it!

One other tip, take your paper up with you. It's all well and good thinking you've memorised it, but you'll kick yourself if the nerves win and you forget some of it. Pretty much everyone takes their words up with them. I still do, even though I try to memorise my stuff.

Hey, if you're Northern, you might want to come along to the Wigan WOL held at the Tudor House pub, 2nd Thursday of every month. Very supportive crowd (of pissheads, shirkers, and general miscreants) ;)

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Am liking your biog Tommy :) :)

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Nice shot - Dave - at unsaying the unsayable.

Maybe needs the first line repeated at the end?

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Good luck for your first time! Practice practice practice, and a nice big deep breath when you get up there!

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Ha - I have just googled too and nowt! It does send out tons of images though - feels like sacrificial ancient custom sorta thing.

I love this line: Men kiss at the river mouth, unborn shift.

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Is that doggers line not about Jeff then? ;D

I really like this - always fond of references to local places and it reads like it would perform well. That last verse jars a little though - but I bet you can hear it in your head and it sounds bang on :)

Can't stand Vernon though. Would sooo smack him in the chops the smug little shit

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Thanks all

Elaine - would love to see it!

Phil - not been too clever mentally lately - in wrong place to come on here.

Thank you Anne and Francine :) I am getting better every day now :)

Ray - strip the meaning? I don't see it like that at all. Condense, yes. Also - that middle verse turns it right around, so you have the two first verses that describe what the wall could be and its effects, and then that middle one turns it around by using the middle line to MENTION the actual wall (it almost IS the wall), and then the next line to show how to see the way through the wall :) The last verse was kinda sorta meant to be structured like ancient sayings :) But as always, thank you for your time and comments :)

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ps. incase you get vexed, this doesnt include you our jeff xx

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this is very good. x

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Morning Neil

Thanks for your note. I'm getting there, but it's all been very 'on top' for a few weeks, one fucking horrible thing after another, and it all kinda battered my head into submission. But - my chi is rising with each day :) I just saw very familiar thought patterns in your poem :)

Next Tudor?

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Original item by Neil Fawcett

All sort of allusions and hints, but Google no help with Narapho. I like this Stella. It summons up a mood.

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Hi Ann

Thank you for commenting. The competitions have only ever been a matter of individual initiative. If you wanted to get the ball rolling on another round, the field is open! Though running the open mic evening may be taking as much time and energy as you have for poetry. Good luck with that.

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Like it, congrats x

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Reads well Ray.. x

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Aww that is disapointing isn't it when you have yourself all ready then whoosh the carpet is swept from under your feet...I am sure Salford will be wonderful for you though...and good luck :)

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Safety pinned and tilted,
they had the world at the tip of their cigarette.

One of many fab bits!

I think I'd leave out the first "their" in the honey and apron line. (Love your stuff!)

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

I found this very uplifting. And the idea of you and Laura both writing on the same subject - made me pine for the days of our WOL competitions - what happened to them? They brought the site together I think.

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Your poems are always worth reading Laura. And I hope you are well :)

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Good poem!

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This is good news Julian, biggupz, big thanks and big respects to the WOL people.

Best Wishes.

Mike

x

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the thirst becomes you...

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Just browsing through Ray and found this gem of a write..I worked with a couple of lads a few years ago with this condition.. I think the last word 'super' is a wonderful end to it..

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Education. I work part time as a TA so hopefully they won't bug me too much! I'm not going to lose sleep over it.

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i like this a lot x

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Well said, Freda. Great to see such a wonderful poetic form put to work to express modern content - although sadly not exclusively a modern ooncern.

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To my understanding this is an excellent example of haiku with a strong last line, doing exactly what it should.

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This made for an absolutley fascinating read Cynthia and I would love to hear you read it. I ma sure the list-like lines would flow beautifully with pauses and intonations. I love your conclusion too and the build up to it in the previous stanzas. Excellent and thought-provoking.

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I like the ambiguity and hints of the imagery, Charlotte. Real depth to it. x

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Good luck - I am sure it will be a fantastic night. I'll be over in Hoylake so won't make it but will be thinking of you. XX

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Ofsted? Oh no! Good luck with that. Is that Ofsted as in re: education or care services? We are awaiting the call at my place too. XX

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A wonderful poem, I thought, especially the 2nd verse. All the better for being a little less obscure and labyrinthine than some of your stuff. Brilliant. Except for the commas.

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thanks for your comment Elaine. The idea was all Stellas and her poem on the theme was a lot better. It's not a subject I like to dwell on but I find other people's poetry stirs it up... and when you have to write something, it comes out whether you like it or not. :)

I'm on the way to feeling better thanks - which is just as well since we have OFSTED in tomorrow... Hope you are feeling better too. xx

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I admire the effort and much of the poem but I think squeezing thoughts into strict forms can sometimes strip the meaning and this seems to have happened with 3rd and 5th verses.

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Original item by Laura Taylor

A spiritual We're Going On A Bear Hunt! In a nice way.

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Such a lovely poem with that tenderness and lightness of touch that is all your own, John. XX

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Although I love everything about this poem the first stanza seems to me to be particularly perfect. The repeated line, "following the ...." is a good touch, very loaded. It's a pleasure to read your work, Marianne. XX

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This has a lovely tone to it, Dave - it is so prayerful. There is a real sense of faith, that the paryers of the tribe will ensure the nurikabe does not prevail. Really good experiment. Enjoyed reading both poems and found it very interesting how you each imbued your poems with your own personal sensibilities. Knowing you both added a special depth to my appreciation. XX

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This is inspiring - love the ending!

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Love this - very clever and the idea of the nurikabe is great. As Dave says haiku is the obvious choice - well done. I can certainly identify with what you have written. I wrote something similar recently! XX

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Original item by Laura Taylor

You always write about interesting things - I think I'm a fan!

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Funny! and i remember them all?Cephalic I looked up brilliant word? never heard of it before xxx

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Sorry to hear about you wibblyness Laura. Are you ok?

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Seen thank you Andy. Really nice poem. Well done.

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Original item by Andy N

A refreshing peep back to the sepia years and protests of another type within a different strata of a back then society.

Seasons regulated the social life of the privileged few while others starved. Yet you let the readers decide this for themselves.

Well crafted poem.

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Original item by Marianne Daniels