Enjoyed this Lynn. Ten lines full of hints of a long story and a rich world - lots for the imagination to work on
Comment is about Ghazal (blog)
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cheers for the comment over the other side, jeff.. means a lot as always and i look forward to hearing you strum something out for this..
on your winter poem of course, it is only a suggestion but i am going to print this out in a bit - see if the poem could be split between the pair of us on friday!
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Thanks Jeff.. it's just been accepted for a magazine too this poem, so clearly i am heading in the right direction for this, but thanks again to all for this..
Comment is about The Other Side (Space Poem) (blog)
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Wed 8th Dec 2010 08:18
hey Isobel.thx for reading and leaving your impressions on dilute to taste..at times i do tend to write with a certain ambiguity, perhaps the coward in me?..anyways look forward to seeing (and hearing) you again xx
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Wed 8th Dec 2010 07:58
I was pulled in to this Lynn..hello..I have read this format a few times on here and now fancy having a go myself..must look up the format. Lovely work
Comment is about Ghazal (blog)
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Well done Lynn. An uplifting maqta too! :-) Win Win xx Title, maybe just Ghazal. What about the first line, could there be a ... or - or at least a , after her? might read more smoothly.
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<Deleted User> (7212)
Tue 7th Dec 2010 23:10
Like it a lot - a little risque
Comment is about Triolet de la Petite Mort (blog)
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Nowt wrong with that! I echo Ann, a true Ghazal for me.
:-)
Jx
Comment is about Ghazal (blog)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 7th Dec 2010 22:11
know I,ll get me arse kicked,but being the fun loving youthful rogue that I am I just could not resist this 'oppo'-I thought it may be permissable to use this decades one comment re your new pik...bleedin 'ell!...Nana Mouskouri gone blonde!...I,ll get me coat!(see yer this day-2020)
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Your poetry has a very delicate subtle touch Stella - good to see you back and posting!
For some reason this poem brings to mind the difficulty in believing in love - although we all need it, believing in its very existence can be hard at times - it involves such a huge leap of faith. Instead we stumble round satisfying different demands but not our emotional ones...
That may not be what you intended to express - your poetry isn't obvious - that is just what I felt from it :) x
Comment is about Dilute to Taste (blog)
Good poem, Larisa, I enjoyed reading this, Warmest wishes, Lynn xx
Comment is about A Voice In the Wildness (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Whaddaya mean I 'struggle with the erotic'...bloody cheek!
:-) :-) :-)
Hope you liked it!
Jxxx
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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thankyou for taking the time to read and comment on all my work :)
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Slowly, silently, now the moon
Walks the night in her silver shoon;
This way, and that, she peers, and sees
Silver fruit upon silver trees;
One by one the casements catch
Her beams beneath the silvery thatch;
Couched in his kennel, like a log,
With paws of silver sleeps the dog;
From their shadowy cote the white breasts peep
Of doves in a silver-feathered sleep;
A harvest mouse goes scampering by,
With silver claws, and silver eye;
And moveless fish in the water gleam,
By silver reeds in a silver stream
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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thankyou for commenting on my poem 'silver'
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
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Hi Lynn . thanks for the comment on Ghazal (your letters) I have had a lot of practice. LOL
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
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Thanks guys - but I got it all wrong again! Rhyme in the wrong place. But, hey, so what! ;-)
Comment is about ghazal ( Fibonacci swirl) (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Tue 7th Dec 2010 19:47
Hello Stella. Thankyou for your comment and yes it is a frightening concept. It was recently pointed out to me that even when we remove one layer there is often another underneath. Fodder for a new poem perhaps?
Regards Yolande
Comment is about Masks (blog)
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These ghazals are very addictive aren't they? I'm hooked! And it's lovely to see you spreading your wings! xx
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
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Lovely, Lynne, full of love, honesty, sincerity. A true ghazal. xx
Comment is about Ghazal (blog)
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I do like your style! So good to be able to write about stuff other people don't even think about. And it moved me too. xx
Comment is about One Anglaland (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hi Andy -
The space between us
was as timeless
as the void between
earth and Mars
brilliant, love this poem as you know and look forward to doing it to some music, its a winner!
Thanx for feedback on 'a winters day' see what you mean about night and day, but was trying to impress the sheer cold brought on by the night, appreciate your observations though cheers mate!
Comment is about The Other Side (Space Poem) (blog)
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<Deleted User> (7789)
Tue 7th Dec 2010 18:35
Good to see something historical! And an unusual historical subject matter, too.
Comment is about One Anglaland (blog)
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<Deleted User> (7789)
Tue 7th Dec 2010 18:33
Some very nice, well-chosen words and phrases there!!
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Tue 7th Dec 2010 18:15
<Deleted User> (6315)
Tue 7th Dec 2010 18:00
Hello Ray, Mixed emtions with this one..your humour comes through with the rhyming format so well..at times I was rather guilty when smiling at some of the lines..those below are just classMade a last house visit and felt just like looters,thought Little Beiruters might break in and shoot us..Once made the mistake of going to see a house that I had spent many good years at..changed out of all recognition..I should have stayed away..anyways I appreciate this write and the rhymed story behind it.
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Tue 7th Dec 2010 17:48
hello..I thoroughly enjoyed the concept of the mask changing during the day..that's a neat idea and works well..I sometimes think if all the masks came off what would be there?..most possibly someone I didn't recognise in my own case..god that's such a morbid thought lol..thought provoking read thanks
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Tue 7th Dec 2010 17:26
I do enjoy the odd triolet or three John...and this one works oh so well..
Comment is about Triolet de la Petite Mort (blog)
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Très bien John ; )
Je vais en faire un...
Comment is about Triolet de la Petite Mort (blog)
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Glad you like it John. Thought it was time I gave WOL a fully focussed frontal - shimmer and all... x
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Are you absolutely sure about that Win?
Sounds like an irrisistible invitation John - though you struggle with erotic, you do saucy very well :)) x
Will we now see a wave of triolets sweeping across WOL I wonder?
Comment is about Triolet de la Petite Mort (blog)
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Good one John you naughty boy :-)
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Hi Dave, thanks for reading Ghazal (your letters). I think technically this is ok, With so many rules however it is easy to end up with something that is 'forced to fit' and has no poetic merit at all. I am hoping my efforts avoid this. Thanks Win X
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Hi again Lynn. hope you find the ghazal info in discussions useful. Could you also please Tag your poem 'Invisible' as Ghazal. Win X
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
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Thanks Win, for the info. Can't I invent a new sort of ghazal with rhymes at the end of each line? ;-) (But these rules and regulations are enough to give you - vertigo!) Great fun though! xx
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
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Hi Winston, thank you for sending me the link on ghazals, I shall have to give them another try! Cheers, Lynn x
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Hi again John, not come across this form before, most interesting. Win x
Comment is about Triolet de la Petite Mort (blog)
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Hi John,
thanks for your kind comment,
very much appreciated :)
peace!
Rachael x
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Hi John, thanks for your recent comments on Ghazal (your letters), I hope I am getting somewhere as I have been researching these things for nearly 3 years now on and off, Maybe its time I tried a triolet. Win X
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What a fabulous last line! It draws the whole thing together and manages to be poignant, wry, funny and heartbreaking all at once.
Goodstuff.
:-)
Jx
Comment is about Kiss, promise, tell (blog)
hi Isobel :)
thankyou for your kind comments,
the vastness of Space is scary, prefer cosey spaces anytime, im a taurean so like my feet rooted to the Earth.
x
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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I've just posted my first triolet. It's a fun form too....and a little more forgiving than Ghazals, but the rhyme scheme is a little bugger to get right.
Thanks for your fabulous help on the ghazal stuff too.
:-)
jx
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
thanks Andy, thanks Cynthia, reworked the second to last line :) dolly pegs are not really used now its all plastic coloured efforts, but its nice to remember the ones my mum used way back when :) x
Comment is about Leaves now a memory (blog)
thanks Cynthia, for such positive feedback and comments,
always very much appreciated
peace to you! x
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Hi Andy :)thanks for the very kind comments, they are much appreciated.best to you!Rachael x
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John Darwin
Wed 8th Dec 2010 08:25
Hi Andy, thanks for your comment on Skipper. I haven't perfromed it yet as I only wrote it last night :-)
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