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Don Matthews

Sun 4th Aug 2019 11:44

This did not happen overnight. Much time and effort went into it's creation. Well done.
One may sometimes feel my 'flippancy' is disrespectful. This is not my intention but to add some 'brightness' to an otherwise difficult situation.

Moaning can be cathartic
And WOL provides a place
Where we can moan to heart's content
Rhyme 'way and fill up space

Now Jason you're a good boy
You're moaned out, properly
You have agreed to now move on
And left moan space for me

How kind......

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elPintor

Sun 4th Aug 2019 11:37

Hi Ray,

I keep coming back to this in my mind. Not that I care to make comparisons against "the boys", but there are times when I can think of no better place to escape than a workshop full of tools and "projects" in various stages of completion about. In moments, when I allow myself to dream, I have such a place. Sometimes, the combination of noise with the process of creation is a form of solace for a restless mind.

..well into a great lazy Sunday, here--guess I'll have to settle for my book and a long walk later in the afternoon to keep me distracted )

Rachel

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John Coopey

Sun 4th Aug 2019 10:21

If it’s hard to understand in 7 words, try 5 minutes’ worth.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=1RjBH9psCPI

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Don Matthews

Sun 4th Aug 2019 09:59

You need to give me a reference poem to go to to see what I wrote

'not sure what you mean here' ??.

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 4th Aug 2019 09:49

Thanks Dorothy, sorry if it looks very slightly different to the first draft, had to edit slightly.
Unfortunately some people who should know better, did worse recently.
All I can say is I'm grateful for most family, all good friends and all the good people here on WOL for providing a place to have a bit of a moan about it.
I shan't carry on down this road.
Moan done, moving on.

J. x

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Adam Rabinowitz

Sun 4th Aug 2019 08:33

Just added one. Cathartic to write and to share. Hope you read.

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 4th Aug 2019 08:31

Go for it my friend, it's quite cathartic.

J. x

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Adam Rabinowitz

Sun 4th Aug 2019 08:20

Damn!!! Preach that shit. This is awesome Jason. Inspires me to put some of that rhyming truth on my site.

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jennifer Malden

Sun 4th Aug 2019 06:25

Really liked this one! Such an intense life in so few years, but will never be forgotten.

Jennifer

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Linda B

Sun 4th Aug 2019 05:29

So moved by this poem, I can hardly see to write through the tears. It touches every nerve associated with my experiences of death - far too many in recent years, as I age - and presses a deeper indentation because of its raw directness and simplicity. I feel sure I will return to it again.

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d.knape

Sun 4th Aug 2019 02:54

thanks Don
for your kind comment on "Mom's Birthday".
written from my heart.

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Don Matthews

Sun 4th Aug 2019 00:23

Hey hey hey. I like everything about this one.....

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 23:24

Thanks Kevin, I wrote this before my fathers death A couple of weeks ago now, maybe it's kind of what he'd indirectly told me in his lifetime, I decided I would tell my boys directly in mine.

J. x

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Jean Sheridan

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 20:12

Hi John - Anthologies - yay! The copy of Ten Twentieth Century Poets that I filched from Middlesbrough High is one of my treasured possessions - having become so familiar with many of the poems for O-level (I think it was), I could not bear to part from them! It contains the poem which is, even after 50 years (gulp!) my favourite - "The Lane" by Andrew Young. * sigh * Oh - and I've just ordered "Worlds" at your recommendation! Jean x

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 19:56

Hi Eve - comment received/received/received/received - thanks ?.

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Philipos

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 19:47

Re; Scent: nudge, nudge, wink, wink. ?

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eve nortley

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 17:52

Having spent weeks canvasing the opinions of teens and twenty somethings when I was writing newspaper copy, I was informed ad nauseum that the reason for the fall in newspaper sales and dropping news viewing numbers is "it's all lies"....what a truly devastating state of affairs. One young lady actually told me she thought the Beeb should give everyone a refund for beaming propaganda into their homes!
Enjoyed the poem..cheers

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eve nortley

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 17:52

Having spent weeks canvasing the opinions of teens and twenty somethings when I was writing newspaper copy, I was informed ad nauseum that the reason for the fall in newspaper sales and dropping news viewing numbers is "it's all lies"....what a truly devastating state of affairs. One young lady actually told me she thought the Beeb should give everyone a refund for beaming propaganda into their homes!
Enjoyed the poem..cheers

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eve nortley

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 17:52

Having spent weeks canvasing the opinions of teens and twenty somethings when I was writing newspaper copy, I was informed ad nauseum that the reason for the fall in newspaper sales and dropping news viewing numbers is "it's all lies"....what a truly devastating state of affairs. One young lady actually told me she thought the Beeb should give everyone a refund for beaming propaganda into their homes!
Enjoyed the poem..cheers

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eve nortley

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 17:52

Having spent weeks canvasing the opinions of teens and twenty somethings when I was writing newspaper copy, I was informed ad nauseum that the reason for the fall in newspaper sales and dropping news viewing numbers is "it's all lies"....what a truly devastating state of affairs. One young lady actually told me she thought the Beeb should give everyone a refund for beaming propaganda into their homes!
Enjoyed the poem..cheers

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 16:31

Thanks for the comments and the "likes". In my retirement, after
years of public service, I channel-hop the late evening news channels and note how similar they are with their preponderance of doom, gloom and scare stories. I wonder about the mind-set of those behind the news who direct what is shown/reported - and in
what sequence/quantity. And just who is pulling THEIR strings?

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 15:12

No! Of course not! "Ulterior Motif" is the mistake! It's actually "motive"! "Motif" is a pattern in art and music, while "motive" is something that motivates you! That was the error! I'd say quite the opposite of thick as a brick dear Don! You have a brilliant mind! ?
Mae

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Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 14:45

You have such a way with poetry. The short lines, easy gentle read. I will always look forward.......

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Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 14:41

Wotif is an error Mae?
Who wrote that New Age dic?
Believe it's someone they call Don
He's thick as bloody brick......

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 14:35

Thank you Jason, in a moment of self-doubt having you as a friend is a blessing! The King's New Clothes, had fogotten all about that one, it pretty much sums it up, spot on!
Don, good idea! That my friend is called good marketing! I could call it: "Wotif And An Ulterior Motif!" There and then you have your first error, mind you!
Thank you guys?
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 12:40

On the Jack and Jill thing?
I learned this one when I was a youngster.

Jack and Jill went up the hill to fetch a roll of cheese,
Jack came down with a smile on his face and his trousers round his knees.?

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 12:35

Mae, firstly considering this is your second language, honestly there are many times I've thought, "Damn, she speaks this better than I do, and it's my only language."
Fear not my friend, your mastery of English is exceptional.
Now as for the poem, oh that made me smile, such a clever little verse with such a clever, cutting little message about how incredibly important it is to avoid, "The emperor's new clothes," and not lose sight of the big picture.
Grammatical errors? We all make them, but don't ever doubt your skill with what I think can be one of the most subtle, expressive and complex languages on the planet. You have a gift.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 12:20

Really like this Don, informative and really good rhythm and scansion.

J. ?

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Lisa C Bassignani

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 12:18

Thank You...to Everyone!
It has been an honor having my work chosen for the week. I love all the comments and my bouquet is busting out of the vase! ??.
The support and camaraderie has been wonderful at WOL, not to mention the learning experience. You're a great, talented and interesting bunch.
Keep thinking and writing.

Lisa

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Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 12:11

Well done MC......

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Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 12:03

Hey Mae here's an idea
Wanna get a lot more comments?
Post a 'Wotif' lots of errors
Whoosh! come error comments

Don't waste your time with handstitched shocks
Cos that's in New Age dic
Nor trouble you with M15t8k3s
Cos M's give it the tick

(you'll have to error-overload. Sorry gal)

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raypool

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 11:39

An enjoyable orgy of imagery , sights sounds and smells . How to conjure up atmosphere. Great stuff and congratulations Lisa!

Ray

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Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 11:37

Oh I do like this Eiren. It's succint with short lines which drew me in to the 'punch line' at the end. My kind of stuff. Well done....

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elPintor

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 11:13

Right on, Adam. And, Buena Vista SC is sublime )

Rachel

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elPintor

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 11:11

A very succinct comment, Adam--you gave me quite a bit to contemplate.

Rachel

PS
There is no new thing under the sun, as it's said--so, re the comment, please do. I would be happy to see it in a piece of poetry )

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Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 11:10

Thankyou Keith. I have a strong urge when writing to educate. I guess it's because my career was in education coupled with a strong desire to impart what I find interesting.

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:58

Ambient! Love it! Your narration always "take me there"! Bravo! ?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:54

I love it, so intricate and so deep. The imagery, metaphors. You have your way with words! And the rhythm and the rhyming add something entrancing it's like rapping but not quite, it's much better! You write in my favorite style! Thank you ?
Mae

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keith jeffries

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:50

Well said. The third stanza says it all.......manipulated by hummanity, manipulated by ourselves who are willingly manipulated.
Thank you for this
Keith

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:48

You have a gift with cadence! And your speech is exemplary, good voice too! I started by reading a prosaic poem of yours and I lived it, "Question" and I thought "the man has a rare gift l. Now I see the man has two or three rare gifts! Kudos Adam ?
Mae

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keith jeffries

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:47

A multi talented lady.
Thanks
Keith

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:45

Oh my God, superb! You're like a contemporary Alain Ginsberg! I love the repetitions, my favorite element in fact. I loved it. Bravo!?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:43

It has an entrancing ritualistic quality that gets you in the zone, with that circular movement... Great work Adam! Now that would sound awesome in audio! I look forward to hear your recital! Perhaps accompanied by a rhythmic simple drum, like bongos!
Excellent ?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:38

Adam, first of all I apologize for taking too long to read your work! Secondly, WOW!!! You are excellent with prose! Kudos! ?
Mae

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Adam Rabinowitz

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:16

I usually choose this one to read at open mic events where often there are just singer songwriters playing guitar and I'm the only one that reads. But I haven't an audio file for this one. I will add.

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Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:08

First of all thank you all! I did try to clean it all up before you had the time to comment!

Adam, there is no risk my friend! Yes of course it's "your"! Thank you! I'm stopping by your profile my friend!

Don, what can I say! Other than "that's an awesome dictionary and I want it!" "Handstiched shocks!" There are no words on this one, put a smile in my face! Now "whateverette" is a new age as you said form of poetry, very radical ?

Devon, fear not! Don't hesitate correct me! I wish it were about commas, but it turns out I'm not a very good poet. When it comes to precision I suck! And while we are on the subject I shouldn't be allowed to type either!


I don't know if it's just me but sometimes I feel like I've forgotten the language!

Thanks all! ?
Mae

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Adam Rabinowitz

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:04

The silence I struggle with the most is the silence of no response...of ghosting....of wishing to know what another thinks or feels but being cut off from that. I think about how different that silence is from that of a boardwalk on a hot summer day that weaves through headlands on the edge of a continent at a time of day when neither breeze nor bird nor insect speaks. That kind of silence is a blessing.

Hope you don't mind if I borrow my comment and go edit it into a poem.

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Adam Rabinowitz

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 09:57

Thank you for this wonderful imagery and sound. I kept hearing Buena Vista social club playing in the background.

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Adam Rabinowitz

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 09:46

That was so wonderful to read.
Thank you.

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Adam Rabinowitz

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 09:43

Enjoying the rhythm and intimacy of your poems.

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