I think it was Wilfred Owen who said that Poet's warn - your poem makes a good point

Comment is about Respect (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

very moving-thank you

Comment is about SWANSONG (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Enjoyable and thought-provoking. Have you seen the 'humorous' book which claims to help motorists identify road-kill?

Comment is about Road Kill, A Lapin Lament (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Sat 1st Jan 2011 16:11


A special Spanish word for greetings as in The New Year

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

such a clever and wonderful read-thanks.

Comment is about Road Kill, A Lapin Lament (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Happy New Year Dave. Lovely sentiments! Nice to have you back around the place! ;-)

Comment is about New Year Wishes (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

there was a competition??

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Isobel - thanks for commenting on New Year Wishes - all the best to you and yours for 2011,
Dave

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Happy New Year you old dog. Will you be learning any new tricks this year, jumping through any new hoops? Is your New Year's resolution to stop writing erotic poetry or is that still the Holy Grail?
Big hugs and kisses. xx

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

Original item by John Aikman

Cheers folks, let's hope 2011 will be used to bring about positive changes in our world :)

ATB Dave

Comment is about New Year Wishes (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

I'm impressed - I tinker about for ages with mine (poems).
What I was trying to say was that it was funny you should be inspired to write about Pandora weeks after the competition and not during. I was just pulling your leg really - as I'm sure you like to pull mine! x

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I like it Cynthia. Love the down to earth 'rich chocolate tart' which kind of goes against the general idea of tea that is supposed to be good for you ha ha

Happy new year ;-)

Comment is about Would you care for tea? (for Elaine) (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Very topical thoughts running throughout this with the new year upon us. It feels hopeful and extremely heart warming. Lovely piece :-)

Comment is about The Passions and The Place (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Marvellous !

Comment is about The Passions and The Place (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Hey Cyn - Winterwalk - (only my 2 cents!!) - I wouldn't fiddle with it - this poem is just about perfect as it is - "girlhood" included. IMHO, if you fiddle too much you can sometimes get a technically "better" work (maybe) but you often lose it's flow, it's soul, it's heart, and this one is so strong at that, that it'd be a real shame. Absolute perfection doesn't exist & for me, this is the best poem I've seen on WOL in a very very long time. all the best. B

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I agree with Steve and Isobel.
Nice one for the new year and all the very best to you :-)

Comment is about New Year Wishes (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

A bit of fun, pretty much off-the-cuff, but enjoyable to write. It's probably a performance piece, leaning on clippity-clop rhythm.

Comment is about Would you care for tea? (for Elaine) (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Re: 'girlhood/childhood' I take the point of universality curtailed, and will think seriously about it. Ironically, this small poem took a lot of work, many many revisions. And I'm not completely satisfied yet.

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I like this Ian. "Cast all but love and faith away" indeed.

Comment is about The Passions and The Place (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Isobel-''Hmph - will you be tagging this with Pandora's Box then?
I like the poem - shame you didn't post it back then - I guess that might have been too conformist for you...
Are you into deep posh gravelly voices then? xx''
@Isobel: I posted the poem within 1 hour of writing it.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Happy New Year...

:-)

Jxxx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

hi andy, just wanted to thank you for the title suggestion. to be honest i rarely give any thought to titles, i just tend to write whatever comes into my head and if it comes with a title then ....
i am flattered, and a little surprised that anyone would bother to read my stuff in the first instance , never mind re - read!
kath x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

And a Happy New Year to you Dave. What a lovely first poem for 2011!

x

Comment is about New Year Wishes (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

sounds like I'm not the only one who wasted all my spending money on weedkiller & sugar, pot permang & mag powder, carbide, zinc & sulpur etc etc etc HaHa

Comment is about Some Sort of Baby Food (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

Clever technique of blinking to rejuvenate the readers attention and a lovely poem in its entirety

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (revised draft) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hiya Isobel :)
Glad you liked 'perfect line'
thanks for your kind comment,
Wishing you an amazing 2011

Rach x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Rodney, I'm a tad confused by your latest post on my site. You open with: 'I don't know' you don't know what Rod? And following: '...overshadowed...' would you explain please?
Thanx
Tommy
:o)

Comment is about Rodney Wood (poet profile)

Original item by Rodney Wood

hiya Andy
thanks for your comments and suggestions on 'perfect Line'
Happy 2011 X

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

blimey Dave! you have been through the wars! we will keep fingers crossed for your good recovery and improving health in the coming New Year-to which I raise glass for you and yours-thank you Sir-Stef.

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

It's a good one.

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I don't know. That you're such a sensitive writer aware of surrounding and personal feeling overshadow the poem.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (revised draft) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

simply beautiful poem...it captures the elusive nature of love and the fascination of its otherworldliness for me...i really like the image of mirroring fingerprints, like desperate effort to catch the truley beautiful, that in nature will always pass,impermanent, fragile and impossible to hold. gorgeous x

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

What a cozy and reflective poem Cynthia. Perfect for this time of year, I too would have liked childhood, Less clunky and having a broader appeal (but thats just me), some great expressions, Win X

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Results announced at 6pm!

Comment is about I need help in this online competition, voting closes at noon on NYE (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

Hi Dave, thanks for you comments on Seat '58A coach D' people forced together in a small space on a train from all backgrounds got to be a fascinating area for poety I think. glad you liked. Win x

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Gorgeous. I have always found that words can be as destructive as constructive; and if words don't come, they aren't needed.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (revised draft) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Great to see you posting again Pete. 'Shark's teeth' is a great simile and the last line is as enigmatic as it is...sinister?

Comment is about The Icicles (blog)

Ha - I once remember commenting on one of yours thinking it was about the end of a loving relationship. It was actually about a very 'actively engaged' menage a trois! LOL - I felt such a prat. Only in my wildest dreams could I have identified with that ;-)

It is good to see you back posting again Tommy. x

Comment is about Daughter: In the year 2020 (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I like the gentle reflective nature of this poem - so in keeping with the falling snow. Graham is right - charming is the word for it - almost like you are shaking up a snow globe with your younger self inside.
Happy New Year to you to Cynthia. x

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I like this one too - such an original way to describe the love game. I like the underpinning sadness about it - the impermanence, the transience.
A really lovely poem.

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

This appears to read like one would blink, then miss the event completely. How did you do that?

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

Cynthia hello. I haven't commented for a little while but thought that I would add my thoughts to this charming piece. Absolutely loved the idea of Lux flakes (well remembered) tumbling from an open box. I would have liked the ending to have said "the cellar of my childhood (to me girlhood doesn't sit right). Anyway, a lovely bit of work to end 2010 on. Look forward to your next year's offerings. Graham

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

really enjoyed this Rach, but am wondering shouldn't you consider splitting the piece up to something like

'We are all dots … just waiting
to be connected to each other.

We mirror fingerprints to find a match.
Planets align as ink lines draw freely.
For a while, on borrowed time.

We find formation in crimson skies.
In backlit flight we say goodbye
To a once engaging perfect line.


Just food for thought, but I particularly like the first two lines..

top stuff - Andy N x

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

lovely (if that is the right word), Georgina. I particularly the use of the sun 'here, gone, left, right'.. Perhaps the next line with the Moon should have 'And I am merely the Moon' in it... but enjoyed it either way xx

Comment is about The Sun and The Moon. (blog)

love the last line Cynthia here in particular, but enjoyed the full poem x

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

@Steve: I usually give some few hours before responding (in order to 'mull')but an interim is in order as a thanks for taking the time.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (revised draft) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I agree with the others. Lovely!

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Your paucity of words achieves much and hints strongly at the interconnectedness in all things - a poem of considerable depth

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

You hinted at some hidden jewels - I see some glimmer leaking from Pandora's chest - beautiful

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks Steve!

Comment is about I need help in this online competition, voting closes at noon on NYE (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson