thank you "Dancing in the rain" Jane !

very good your stuff

take care

Carmine

Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)

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Tghs is really good, I had never heard of it but will visit it now.

Comment is about A meditation - the Sun Goddess of Bidston Hill (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

The photo is a perfect match for this piece... I am sure I have seen her image before..
The changing text really keeps you on your toes which is how it should be with this edgy poem- it gave me jolts as I wondered what was coming next and I was left me wanting more. Sian X

Comment is about Claire (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Weaving your prose around the chords of Rachmaninoff? I expect your story to be quite a grandiose, maddening experience...

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I enjoyed this too. Mancunians are all Rain Gods.

Comment is about Northern Rain (blog)

Original item by Carmine Grimshaw

Hi Cynthia - your words of praise for mine, were the ones I would have chosen. Can't do better than that, can I! In return I cite your 'Fly in the Butter'. When the title spikes up the poem - bliss.

Comment is about Just Three Thoughts (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mr Singleton, this is powerful. You wield 'clever' like a whip, dripping with healing irony. The last two lines are outstanding.

Comment is about DISTANCE (blog)

Original item by Barrie Singleton

I agree with all of the above contributions...this is beautifully told and not only in story form but carefully poetic too. thanks for your comments you were spot on by the way re liberation ...thats what I was trying to convey....most of my stuff has 'hidden' meaning so it's lovely when someone spots it...thanks Sian X

Comment is about Force Seven (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

So. Did you finally give it a blast then? Poetry performance or fireworks display, it's very colourful in its own way.
Nice, very nice poem Sian.

Janet.x

Comment is about The Long Fuse (blog)

Original item by sian howell

This is really quite deep in social behaviour and human trials regardless of age.
Love the last stanza.

Janet.x

Comment is about Serenicity. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Hello Sian HNY to you. Thank you for commenting on Happy New Year. I unfortunately was one of those in last night's clothes. Have just read The Long Fuse. Will comment after a couple more reads. Always necessary with your work. I'm looking for the clever bits that you hide so well. Graham

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

This isn't cricket Tommy?

Comment is about Art House (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

...well the rhythm is better but the line's meaning is madder than a bag of frogs.

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

...and the additional 'to'...to go with the flow...

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

If you will give the dog a bone...

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Nice one this, Sian with a positive end. you have a strong voice. win x

Comment is about The Long Fuse (blog)

Original item by sian howell

"if anyone can help me slip in the word fellatio"

If you say sho!

(well, it's hard to talk with your mouth full)

: )

Jx

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

notice the extra brackets Rachel!

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Simon, I feel the pain of being ignored by Sir Jimmy myself, also having neglected to send in the letter asking to be a ballerina for a day or whatever it was. I did have him as a friend on myspace some years ago though.
I liked your samples a lot
Rachel
x

Comment is about Simon Lee (poet profile)

Original item by Simon Lee

Kealan, we're all 'fairly shit' -- in our own eyes or those of others, but so what. 'Poetry will teach you poetry' -- that's all we need to remember.

So the greatest tribute we can offer to each other is this, as from me to you -- 'Keep writing..you have something to say..'

Michael

Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Yay!
Faberoo,
Rachel
x

Comment is about Art House (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Ha Ha my sister has a heated loo seat that sprays your bum, perfumes it and then dries it, does that count for a WOW factor heh heh?
TC XX

Comment is about The WOW Factor (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

i hope whoever this poem is directed at got what they deserved. no worse redemption than the sodomizing of an enemy

Comment is about Art House (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

thanks for your comment johnny

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

Original item by John Darwin

I love the sound of your voice Annipoo..... sad but heart wrenching poem though, I hope it isn't about you.
Love TC XX

Comment is about If you can read this . . . (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Most of us have slow burn fuses.... ;-)Fun though when the fizzing stops and BOOM.. ha ha.....great poem ;-)
TC X

Comment is about The Long Fuse (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Goodness, cheers Chris (I'm actually 'Chris' too, but not Aloud to be atm)

You're conviction and appreciation is..er..appreciated, and I'm sure that we could speculate regarding you observations *winky wink wink*

I welcome you potential amendments, clearly demostrates that you gave it a good going over - which is both rewarding and flattering.

However I don;t actually proof, re-write or revisit (in the main) If I did then I'd probably replace 'who's' with 'those'.

Hell, I think I'ma gonna!

That pic give me the bleedin creeps, nice one.

All the best.

Comment is about Joy to watch (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

This is excellent, Sian, imaginative and emotive,with very concise, expressive diction. It tells a great story of personal liberation and courage. And a 'catchy' title too, one that is almost a three-word summary as well as an introduction - very hard to do.

Check 'silence'.

Comment is about The Long Fuse (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Mr Turner, you are right, of course, about grammar and punctuation being optional in poetry. And Rachel's meaning is very clear. I stand chided.

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Polish it? Tommy I think it's succinct and achingly resonant just the way you did it. You ought to post it 'as is'. Rachel
x

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

This made me smile because there are actually people like this...

'a stainless steel kitchen
just like the TV cooks.
I’m never going to cook in it
it’s only for the looks.
It’s got to be quite minimal
so we’re selling all our stuff
all the family heirlooms
(well, we really had enough)
so we can buy an Eames armchair,
it cost ten thousand pounds,
it isn’t very comfortable
so we just stand around.'

Comment is about The WOW Factor (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I can relate to this in many ways Sian.
It takes courage to speak publicly...
Laughter relieves the tension and captures
the audience's attention so that you can get your message across.

Love these lines:
'These words within-
sparkled fireworks ignited-
more than sound or noise
but coloured magic of sorts,
exploding airbourne streams of
simple
innocent
laughter-
setting the sky
to rainbow shades.
The crowd raise their gaze in wonder'

Comment is about The Long Fuse (blog)

Original item by sian howell

love this Ann.is this where you take your toyboy for filffy weekends.or do you still prefer to vegitate by the cold coal-less grate.perhaps doing the coalman favours orally might pay dividends-that means speaking nice to him-not the other kind.if you prefer the former,how do i get a 'job' on your coalsuppliers? lol!good poem Ann.keep at it,one day you might become of some use.love to stay,but my husband is calling-Stefanananx

Comment is about The WOW Factor (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Both, thanks for the welcome, looks like a really useful site.

Comment is about Ant Smith (poet profile)

Original item by Ant Smith

Well, I think we are all agreed that we would like to see the back of the snow!I liked the way you set the scene in this poem. There can surely be nothing more tranquil and unhurried than a buddhist prayer...I also liked the comparison of the wind brushing snow to the action of your father cleaning his boots.Not at all sure about the Andrex toilet paper. Maybe it is my schoolgirl sense of humour, but you can't mention toilet paper without me wanting to giggle. Unless I am alone in that or unless that is the effect you are wanting, I would consider changing the image. I liked the simple, matter of fact ending though - great contrast to the rest of the poem. x

Comment is about Early January Snow Blues (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Rachel Hi, linking your themes: the class system, wood, sex, theft, reclamation and 'house porn' also the use of brackets - the following:

Fuck you!(you middle-class twat)
Up your arse (with a bamboo bat),
Stolen from my table
Like a sex craved rat
Fuck you on your reclaimed mat
Up your sphincter
With a painful splat.

this may need some polishing, ask Stefan for his help.

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Hi John. Keep looking, keep blogging and we will keep reading.
Winston

Comment is about John Turner (poet profile)

Original item by John Turner

Hi Star, I suppose a warm bed allows a mind to fly it's kite, while cold feet thinks of thicker socks! - Tommy

Comment is about Intellect Makes A Poor Blanket (blog)

Hi Ant . welcome to WOL hope you like what you find here. Winston

Comment is about Ant Smith (poet profile)

Original item by Ant Smith

Hi Carmine welcome to WOL . good to see you are getting to grips with the various aspects of the site - have fun. Winston

Comment is about Carmine Grimshaw (poet profile)

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Hi Andreas.Hope you enjoy the site. Winston

Comment is about Andreas Grant (poet profile)

Original item by Andreas Grant

It certainly is Graham. Blow jobbed would rhyme with door knobbed and you do blow on things when you are giving them a polish -unless you use a Mr. Sheen spray...
An interesting one Rachel. Like the ideas in it and the end. Yes we all would!

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

What would Kevin McCloud think of all this, Rachel? Or did his undoubted loveliness inspire some of the references? ;-)

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Isn't Blow Job easier to rhyme with??

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

I found this to be really quite sad. It touched me as i know a few people who have the problems associated with alcohol abuse to drown their sorrows etc...

Janet.x

Comment is about Lost In Drink (blog)

Original item by Carmine Grimshaw

If you do- leave i mean. Can you take the snow back with you please?

I enjoyed reading this poem.
Welcome to wol blogs too.
Janet.x

Comment is about Northern Rain (blog)

Original item by Carmine Grimshaw

Have you seen the discussion thread someone started on this theme?
Seems we're all gettin' 'em.

Janet.x

Comment is about HIDE'N TO NOTHING? (blog)

Original item by Barrie Singleton

..hello Ann..thank-you..I used the blackbird for two reasons..if 'man' disappears from the planet all the flora and fauna and planets will carry on regardless, they have no interest in any religion, and I've never seen a blackbird being instructed on how to build a nest, we don't understand how they know..therfore they are an obvious creature to take us by the hand and explain the universe, something no 'man' will ever be able to do.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Glad you changed the title.

Love the first stanza because it reminds me of that uncertain moment of travelling down-hill on a wing and a prayer.
Also not wanting to spoil the beauty of the first snows by adding tyre tracks etc..

I love the silence as the snow falls, it's as if the world has stopped revolving for those few precious moments in time and allows us to reflect on memories. Like yours about your Father's boot shaking off snow.

I'll be glad to see the back of it too now though. :-)
Janet.x

Comment is about Early January Snow Blues (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Commas are optional. Grammar & punctuation in poetry... is totally optional.

Comment is about House Porn (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery