This is a rather amusing one Chris!
Yeah... blame it on 'Little Miss' and 'that tumbling “dream” of a dryer'... etc... LOL

Francine x

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Funny, well-observed, true, near-perfect. I would prefer it without caps and exclamation mark at the end. The audio version doesn't have them, I notice. You may be snowed in but are producing great stuff

Comment is about newsreaders (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Merci beaucoup Gus pour tes commentaires sur mon poème
'Bound together'...
Je suis toujours ravie quand ce que j'écris te plais : )

xxx

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Original item by Gus Jonsson

Good evening,unusually named Carmine(nice)second line suggestion-"another pint,from another pot"?.good poem nevertheless,clever.Thanks-Regards-Stefan

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Original item by Carmine Grimshaw

Je t'adore Isobel !
Merci beaucoup pour tes commentaires sur mon poème 'Bound together'...
Tu me touches toujours avec ta générosité...
Et tu me fais constamment rire - qu'est-ce qu'on va s'amuser quand je viens visiter : )

xxx

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Original item by Isobel

Thanks Rachel! V kind of you. I quite often have men laughing... but usually that's when Ive taken off my clothes... ;)

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Original item by Mab Jones

Like this very much Steve. Please excuse my ignorance if it's something really obvious - but what is the significance to 2 degrees? I've heard before of 6 degrees of separation, but not 2.
Cx

Comment is about 2 Degrees (blog)

"This speck of dust I occupyWith a billion other fools"

This is a great opening line. It has lyrical rhythmic quality that I can almost hear 'Grip' by The Stranglers being played over the top of it...but maybe that's just me. Pity that it loses this rhythm a little way in but the first few lines drew me in nevertheless. Nice one Steve.

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cheers synf, corrected it be, felt something of the pillock when I read that, especially as presented. <grin>

and that you too foxy, I can actually still feel that moment when I re-read, rewarding that you can sense too.

Comment is about Joy to watch (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

This flows really well...
Great message!

And how did you get that little degree sign?
I can't find one on my computer...

Comment is about 2 Degrees (blog)

Blimey! A lot of lovely and inciteful comments. I found stuff to do while I was trapped, but I wrote this on my third day there, when cabin fever was manifest in weird dreams I was having.

It is, as Cynthia says, roughly written and that took a while to get right/wrong, because it initially came out too rigidly rhythmical and the prosody was too bouncy for the feeling I was expressing(like writing a sad song to the tune of here we go round the mullberry bush).

Thanks all and big hugs back! x

Comment is about No way out (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

I am listening:))

Comment is about Natasha (poet profile)

Original item by Natasha

Yes Natasha : )

Comment is about Natasha (poet profile)

Original item by Natasha

About bolsheviks??

Comment is about Natasha (poet profile)

Original item by Natasha

About Bolsheviks??

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Cynthia
Thanks for the comment.
I know it sounds naive, but I'm not sure what 'worked on' means. Put before a workshop? I wouldn't go near one. I'm not blase, it's just that a poem wouldn't be mine afterwards.
The poem came to mind after the Copenhagen conference on climate change, and a comment by a scientist that we are only 2 degrees away from an irreversible change in our climate.
xx Steve xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

'Lets have a debate!'

Comment is about Natasha (poet profile)

Original item by Natasha

And a joy to read. This ls lovely, Christopher. I do appreciate reading new lyric poetry that uses talented rhyme and metre to express special moments from the 'natural' world around us.
Please check 'distain'; I think you want 'disdain' for 'haughty indifference'. When we say the word most of us put the 't' sound into it, like 'distance', because it's easier.

Comment is about Joy to watch (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

"Rude logic measures the steel, the wind, the wand" love that.

thanks for your encouragement and continued comment, I read your profil and would love to chat apres poetry event! Never enough time to talk at these gigs!

Pete x

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I have heard you reading a few times and really enjoy. Russian sounds beautiful and I think that it is a passionate language in the way it sounds. I studied Russian cold war politics and would love to travel there.

"And even shattered schick of shelter ..I’m
Half blooded card of subdivided suit!"

love the 'shattered shick' idea.
Would like to see more readings from you sometime.

Comment is about Natasha (poet profile)

Original item by Natasha

Hey Steve, great to see you posting.
Loving this poem too.

Janet.x

Comment is about 2 Degrees (blog)

Super, Tommy. Your brain cells are whizzing. The first line is out-standing. Are there enough syllables to arrange into a tanka or cinquain? Just curious.

Comment is about Advice to bi-peds (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Really good.Great title. It sounds 'worked on'. If it wasn't, I'm so envious.

Comment is about 2 Degrees (blog)

Looking forward and looking back. The Janus thing is always tinged bittersweet. Welcome to WOL Carmine.

Comment is about Carmine Grimshaw (poet profile)

Original item by Carmine Grimshaw

I like this, and I love crows and rooks and ravens. I think they often look as if they are swooping around up there on a windy day for the joy of simply doing it.

Comment is about Joy to watch (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Thought the title was brilliant to this one Tommy... take care on those roads. Win

Comment is about Advice to bi-peds (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I'm also working with an exceptional artist, Ken McCalla and have developed a children's picture book;
"Vircheu and the Bow".
Now available at Foyles, New Beacon Bookshop, www.enkbooks.co.uk, Amazon and your local bookshop.

Comment is about Eli Anderson (poet profile)

Original item by Eli Anderson

Hi Cynthia. A heavtweight poem this. Impressive. Made me tired reading it. lol. a difficult and lonely job for these men on the lines. It reminded me of the lyrcs in a Nanci Griffith song (below)

Nobody seems to care about you
With your tool case by the roadside
There beneath the power lines
Or the pallor of your skin
Paled beneath fluorescent lights
In a Greyhound station's cruel midnight
Where you can't afford the ride

Oh, the power lines
They go from sea to sea
They carry voices
Love from him to me
The power lines you fall beneath
Are the rainbows you can't climb

Comment is about Force Seven (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Cynthia. thanks for reading 'Browns Convention'. the poem has been edited and I have added some commentary on the blog. Win :-)

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

The Best Chris. Absolute and superb. So so proud of you. Clean and tight writing. WOW! 'the bath tub that is left behind' wow! what a line, that is art, so proud Chris.

so happy for you, you just keep going

Love Pete
once again, wow, what a poem. Love it. Morrissey would be proud of this baby

Comment is about Newly Married Man Takes A Cashiers Job At A Supermarket And Studies At The Open University In The Hope Of Bettering Himself. (blog)

Considering you're new to rhyme this really is very good indeed! Even if you were an 'old hand' at it I would still have that opinion.Some lovely original imagery here.(Shirley Alexander spotted my favourite!)..... the rhyme isn't forced but flows quite naturally from the story and every word is apt and precise.I would agree with a few of the comments about the structure and the use of capitals at the beginning of each line. I think the poem would be easier to read from the page with lower case, especially as a lot of your lines which have end rhymes continue without pause into the next line. It took me several readings to get to grips with the way the poem is meant to read rather than how it looks, but in terms of the content, the imagery, the rhyme and rhythm, you clearly have a natural talent which should be encouraged. The fact you have maintained iambic pentameter almost throughout without even realising it indicates your instinctive feel for pleasing poetic rhythm and form. Lovely stuff!!:-)

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Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Pent up? Negative? Dermot?
No way! Roughly written? Oh yeah!
Dermot i mean not the poem. :-)

I feel for you Dermot but trust me, driving around in this weather is not recommended and certainly not a relaxing pastime. Stress of it finally got the better of me today.

Janet.x

Comment is about No way out (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Good evening catgut twanging Cate.this poem makes me want to get 'me kaftan on.you look well Diana-ish in the pikky.desirable even-woo-oo! yep,good poem-hari-krishna dude-Stefan-ps-are there bags behind the shades?too much WOL!lol!

Comment is about Taj At Sunset (blog)

Original item by Cate

Hi Cate,
thanks for commenting on my poem about Miles Platting. I like 'gritty' and Northern, although we could do with some real grit around here lately eh!

Janet.x

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Hi Isobel, thanks for commenting on my poem about Miles Platting.
I enjoy personifying places and birds/animals too.
It's a while since i wrote one.

Janet.x

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Original item by Isobel

Hi Paul,
just want to say i've read your Bach Remedy haiku. Every one of them and i love them. Great simplistic photographic images also. I'm pleased you didn't use the traditional form 5-7-5 for these. They're wild flowers and need to be free.

Janet.x

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Original item by Paul Conneally

Hi Ann,
yes i agree with you on your audio.You achieved your aim. Well done.

Janet.x

ps thanks for your comment on my poem about Miles Platting. I have done a few similar ones a while ago. I enjoy personifying places and sometimes animals/birds too.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Saw old Edgar many times from mid 60s onward! Out Demons Out! Ironically I've never seen the Exorcist.
Here's a link to a great version of Out Demons Out!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ce-v2EyG52Y

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ann. your wishes have been answered re our recent conversation about the text editor... (And incidentally mine too). Win

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Negative - you? Never!... If you are feeling cold Dermot, why don't you take a trip up to the attic and find some way of warming up? I found this one sad. However, I am quite sure you are not alone in all of this - us poets feel too keenly - some just disguise it better. A big warm hug from me too. x

Comment is about No way out (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

A lot of philosophy tucked into this in a chuckling way. Well-written and completely engaging from start to finish. Ending is great! Nothing like a good question. Made me think of a puppy teasing a rag and just getting totally bored, dropping it and sniffing around for more responsive entertainment.

Comment is about More than a puzzle (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Big hug!
Cx

Comment is about No way out (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

So... This is the poem you wrote huh?
Jeeez DG, you say "No way out' but clearly there were some options...
You could have sat by the fire reading a really good book - and I could come up with many more fun things for you to do...

What happened to your inner child?
Did you go build a snowman, fort, or igloo like I told you??? ; )

Comment is about No way out (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Well ... OK ... neat analogy with 'The Big Freeze' ... a clever topical outlet for pent-up emotions, perhaps typifying many of us. But, in honesty, while this is an interesting approach, I think the poem is roughly written.

Comment is about No way out (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Or a ninety-year old lady giggling hilariously. Quite a warm little poem.

Comment is about Kicking the leaves (blog)

Original item by Alan McKean

Barring a thing that stops me, I will be going to the Tudor, and will do that poem there. Must say I'm rather touched by all these requests I've been getting from people lately.

At other times, they request me to do bad things, and when I open my eyes they're not there. Strange that.

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

this is great. the rhythm, meter and rhyme really carry it on. i'm sure it must be fun to read aloud.

Comment is about Darling Sweatheart (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

excellent rhythm, meaty syllables and strong imagery. well done.

Comment is about Force Seven (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

i like the way you extract emotional depth from such a prosaic wordly phrase. it reminds me of latter day joni mitchell.

Comment is about If you can read this . . . (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

this is a very common scene from my life. i have been through every brand of cat food in the last year to keep my cat - leonard - entertained. it's amazing how cool and aloof cats can seem whilst just as equally brain dead.

Comment is about twit-like (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove