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Belinda Johnston

Thu 31st Dec 2009 20:09

I wrote this poem over the Christmas period, whilst eating sprouts and turkey!! Eating all of that food made me think of Japan, it's food, culture and peace and coming home after such a long time away. All comments would be very welcome.

Love Belinda x

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 31st Dec 2009 19:14

Have a great new year Mr Wood! It's thinking about what will have happened by this time next year that is so exciting, and scary too. This time last year, I could not have predicted so many things that have happened. Mostly good things, whereas last year, it was one really bad thing. So fingers crossed! I approve of your positive poem!

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 31st Dec 2009 19:10

I'm so disappointed that it's cloudy here. But I guess the moon is still up there, being new and blue and, actually, it's being partially eclipsed too!!!

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Rachel McGladdery

Thu 31st Dec 2009 18:49

I love this, what with my own penchant for lingerie and all. Have a lacy frothy pink scented new year.
Love
Rachel
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Rachel McGladdery

Thu 31st Dec 2009 18:46

I loved this Cynthia, there is something that is absolutely exquisite about it. It's so precise and beautiful. Loved "silly little pretty pink penis" and "hardly wetting the roseate head"
Happy New Year
Rachel
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Noetic-fret!

Thu 31st Dec 2009 18:29

Man, that's dark dave. Bleak and dark, still, we are all just like every year around this time, hoping that things will once again change. Lets hope they do for this next decade, as the one we have just had i am glad to see the back of. Nice one Dave.

all the best for 2010

mike

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Brian Wood

Thu 31st Dec 2009 18:05

Ann-Well written-sounds like the best way to drown to me. Happy new year

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John Aikman

Thu 31st Dec 2009 17:18

Just as well that Christmas comes but once a year. If music be the food of love...I'll have a crotchet sandwich, and make it snappy!

Thank you Cynthia, for showing how filth should really be written. : )

Seriously, though, you have emboldened me...I need to be less inhibited with my writing...I will need to take a leaf from your music book...so to speak.

Fine stuff!

Jx

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Gus Jonsson

Thu 31st Dec 2009 16:19

Masturbation set to music...
possibly 'Strictly Come Dancing

'What delightful piece superb!!!.

Well done Cynthia!

HNY!

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 31st Dec 2009 16:16

pretty pink penis peeking through the hole in his pants. What a way to wave the year goodbye. HNY Cynthia.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 31st Dec 2009 16:08

Good-bye 2009!

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Gus Jonsson

Thu 31st Dec 2009 16:08

Black is black
I want my panties back

Thanks fer yer cheery banter,,, yes you are right size 18 is a bit Bridget...even 4 me.. poor Francine possibly size 4 ladies squeeze into very little these days ... so I am given to understand.

Happy New Year

Gusxx

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Gus Jonsson

Thu 31st Dec 2009 16:02

Hey up Our John... me poem is laid in a bi lateral form insofar as it helps me perform ican quickly scan the page to breathe, pause, emphasis, burp..whatever.
However, thats not to say that your suggested edit is not an improvemnt ... because poem to page I think it is, but I would take my version to the open mike...I;ll read and record both versions an try an prove a point, in the New Year, little sense will come from until I have made a fool of myself at the bells.
Have a gud'yun, by the way hope yer bum is on the mend.

Gus

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 31st Dec 2009 15:52

I'm going on a Marianne splurge this coming week, to read all your November/December poems again.

One thing you might do for the new decade pf poetry is clear up 'its' meaning 'belonging to'. Just remember the 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is'. Your best must be the best. If you wish, I will point out any spelling errors I see, but only with your permission. Editting is easier now that the corrections don't catapult to the front every time.

Happy New Year. I think 2010 will be your poetry lift-off!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 31st Dec 2009 15:41

Happy New Year, Tommy. I almost detect the glimmer of optimism lately.

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Andy N

Thu 31st Dec 2009 13:59

interesting stuff, kealan... i think the use off you, you works well just before the end in particular.. good stuff!

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Andy N

Thu 31st Dec 2009 13:58

groove to this m8. good stuff!

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Andy N

Thu 31st Dec 2009 13:57

possibly a extra go too many for my liking here, marianne but i did enjoy this! x

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Andy N

Thu 31st Dec 2009 13:54

One of your favourite pieces for me that I have read off us.. It really sings out to me - beauitful! Keep it up!

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Thu 31st Dec 2009 10:49

Hi Ann,
yes i changed. Trust me, it's only a google image. :-)

Happy new year.
Janet.x

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kealan coady

Thu 31st Dec 2009 10:46

kylie mynogue poem (short and beautiful)

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Thu 31st Dec 2009 10:43

Thanks for the comment Isobel.
Love the new pic. Makes you look all young and innocent and yet....

Happy new year.
Janet.xx

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Greg Freeman

Thu 31st Dec 2009 10:41

Hi Ann, I have today decided that my new year resolution is to keep my toenails trimmed, and hopefully save my socks from being ripped to shreds so quickly. Not much of an ambition perhaps, and too much information maybe, but thanks for the inspiration anyway! Greg

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Noetic-fret!

Thu 31st Dec 2009 09:48

Came back and read it several more times. Top Poem

Mike

x

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Francine

Thu 31st Dec 2009 03:39

Amusing, yet cynical view...
Either she is an imposter, or the Prince a real toad ; )

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Francine

Thu 31st Dec 2009 03:15

Simply lovely : )

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 31st Dec 2009 01:59

yes it should have been win. I will change. thankyou for kind comments. x

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Thu 31st Dec 2009 00:44

nice and concise Tommy-love the pic! keep well Mr C.

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Isobel

Wed 30th Dec 2009 23:26

So your wife spent up in the sales then...

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Christopher Dawson

Wed 30th Dec 2009 23:19

cheers matey, appreciated...have to give any possible credit to an amazing artist tho!

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winston plowes

Wed 30th Dec 2009 23:09

Do you mind the fact that everyone always assumes that the poems we write are based on ourselves? This is such a strong, personal poem, but you could have invented the scenario. I feel that I'd like to write a poem and leave it open as to whether it is based on me and my experiences. If you write a novel about a mass murderer, people don't assume you are a nmass murderer. Or is it that poetry is always a sort of truth? Don't know. lotsoflove ;-)
Ann, couldn't agree more with your comments above posted on Rachels blog entry... thats what poets do isn't it? If people assume you are writting from personal experience then thats a bit of a leap surely? Win

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winston plowes

Wed 30th Dec 2009 23:01

What a lovely thing to read whist I am surrounded by ice and freezing rain. Great flowing rhymes here too. Win

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winston plowes

Wed 30th Dec 2009 22:30

Should it be 'epitaphs read'?

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winston plowes

Wed 30th Dec 2009 22:27

I am a shredded ribbon,
a suffering jet stream behind him,
a withering farcical lace stapled to my face
and it will not unveil
and it will not.

This particular section is so strong it stands as a poem on its own Marianne. Brilliant. Win

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winston plowes

Wed 30th Dec 2009 22:22

It's money Cinderella wants and moneyis another word for love, silence and the weight of the sun.Loved that last section which really grabbbed me with its powerful contrasts, closed things nicely Rodney. Win

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Rachel McGladdery

Wed 30th Dec 2009 22:15

Thank you John for your kind comment, Particularly glad we share an affection for the word Arse, it's a favourite of mine too. I say it quite a lot! x

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Wed 30th Dec 2009 22:12

Hi Mab , Welcome to WOL. Two very different poems inyour sample. Winston

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Rodney Wood

Wed 30th Dec 2009 22:04

Thanks for your kind comment on Cinders. Sometimes it's good to play the bastard although for the record I've been happily married for 36 years.

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Mab Jones

Wed 30th Dec 2009 21:19

Well, Mab, no-one seems to have made a comment, yet... Please allow me to be the first. x

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Noetic-fret!

Wed 30th Dec 2009 21:16

Hi Isobel, thanks for commenting on my work. You're spot on as is chris co. I have left a comment on that will clarify what the army speak means. By the way, i like your work.

thanks once again.

Michael

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Noetic-fret!

Wed 30th Dec 2009 21:11

Hi Chris Co and Isobel, you're both absolutley spot on with your comments, and thanks for taking the time to read and understand. Here are the army speak words that you wanted to know;

CIVS = Civilians
DIVS = Divisions, in other words, a large collection of soldiers, a bit like many companies getting together and all forming a DIVISION
MP4 = Short Automatic Assault Weapon
SUNRAY = Officer Commanding or Commanding Officer (of a unit).
SITREP = Situation Report

Phillip Glass is a composer. If you want to check out a piece of work that he has done, try and go to YOU TUBE, and type in Hamburger Hill - Phillip Glass. Its a very inspiring piece that means a lot to many soldiers.

I can say, it really is frustrating being in civilian street, and yes, plagued by how you have been trained and conditioned. Thank you for taking the time once again.

Mike

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Wed 30th Dec 2009 21:06

Great ! - hope you've got a big mirror.... and, on the subcheck of mirrors ......

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Isobel

Wed 30th Dec 2009 21:01

Awww - you're a sweetie - I've never been called beautiful before. This is one of the rare facial photos I'd bother to put up - am just not photogenic. In fact, I have to look that way cos my nose is crooked if I go the other! Glad you approve though and I hope you won't miss the ankles too much - they were never mine...xx

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Isobel

Wed 30th Dec 2009 20:48

Am making this comment without reading what Chris wrote cos I don't want to be influenced. The over riding message for me was the despair and hoplessness of the old soldier with no meaningful purpose. When you are trained to kill, just what do you do when you retire? And how do you dismiss the hideous memories you must take round with you? There were several words I didn't understand (CIVS, DIVS - SUNRAY SITREP) I guess CIVS must be civilians - is divisionals another word for soldier? Also don't know who Philip Glass is. A glossery of words might be a good idea in poems like this - my general knowledge stinks.
Sometimes however - you just don't need to understand all the words. In this poem, the despair and bleakness cries out. A sad one Mike x

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 30th Dec 2009 20:38

I think you are brilliant with words, tho I don't understand them all. But I do like this poem, and have read it a few times, it draws me back.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 30th Dec 2009 20:27

Call me a wet blanket, but I like it when the fairy tale goes wrong. It's real life. (Mind you, who is this Cinderella lookalike who has commented before me?) Compelling final lines

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Isobel

Wed 30th Dec 2009 20:25

Oooo - this smacks of a nasty divorce settlement poisoning your poetry. Not all women are the same Rodders... I'd settle for a handsome prince - so long as he wasn't after MY gold of course... Love the venom in this - though I shouldn't - it is very direct and cutting.

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John Aikman

Wed 30th Dec 2009 20:23

Cor....lovely! I'll miss the ankles...but love the wry smile...and beautiful face.

: )

Jx

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Wed 30th Dec 2009 14:49

I really enjoyed the rolling theme throughout this one. Too many good lines just to pick out odd ones. Love it as a whole.

Janet.x

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Wed 30th Dec 2009 13:36

Ahoy Dave,

Really like this!

Mingo.

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