Your apparent anger mixed with humour makes for some very entertaining poetry!
Comment is about Give him a grid reference, for the love of god. (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
As omnivores, we owe it to ourselves and others
to exist in this world with as little
suffering as circumstances allow. Self-imposed
fastidiousness in eating is a matter of choice
we are allowed through nature's bounty. Other
creatures follow narrower paths of existence,
that's all.
Comment is about Hell From Leather (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Charming - imaginative, with a flow of lyrical melody and rhythm inherent in your diction. Surely, this is no novice work. Skill abounds.
Comment is about Winter's debate with spring (blog)
Original item by Gina Mae Jarvi
Terrific - clever, fast and funny, with some sharp social commentary biting through.
Comment is about Talking the Walk (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
An excellent character sketch. Clipped but fulsome in thought, intent and execution. And effect.
Comment is about Snowman (blog)
Original item by pauline sewards
Time presses - I will be back - it looks fascinating.
Comment is about Cradle - A Triolet (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hey Starfish. Thanks for checking out my stuff. I do love that tinge of excitement when I find someone has written a comment on my work. The Bobby Kennedy poem needs a tweak but glad you liked it, best wishes -Steve
Comment is about Starfish (poet profile)
Original item by Starfish
Fabulous! Brings back memories of childhood sea side holidays. Best wishes, Steve
Comment is about A Sea Poem (blog)
Many thanks for your comments Cynthia. I have written a few poems on the mental health system, and found this to be one of the most difficult to write. I have to agree that the first few verses were the most striking, but found it hard to continue it, in that vein. Thanks for your interest and will take heed of the advice.
Cheers Dean
Comment is about Mental Health Incarceration (blog)
So much of this is really good, catching the reader's interest and empathy. IMO, it runs out of effective steam about halfway, as though the final stanzas are forced into being, becoming a personal political 'rant'. I think it is a confusion of points to be made. Perhaps it needs to be two separate poems.
Always with respect. I'm surprised no one else has responded.
Comment is about Mental Health Incarceration (blog)
This is very unusual, and very effective. IMO, the precise repetitions and small variations give a real feeling of fascination, almost voyeurism, and passing 'insignificance', like the movements of a crowd.
Comment is about Assignation (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
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Sun 16th Jun 2013 10:13
Sweet,with a nice little touch of humour.x
Comment is about Talking the Walk (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
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Sun 16th Jun 2013 10:12
One of your best Steve,thanks.x
Comment is about It Doesn't Matter (blog)
Original item by Steve Higgins
Many thanks for your kind comments on "House of the Rising Damp". A true-ish story!
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
The winner was Kate White You can read some of her poems here http://www.poetryschool.com/news/pighog-and-poetry-school-pamphlet-winner--kate-white.php
Comment is about Can you dig out your 10 best poems? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
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Sat 15th Jun 2013 19:10
Fitting tribute.Thank you.
Lee will never be forgotten.xx
Comment is about Sonnet for Drummer Lee Rigby, posted on behalf of Robin Parker from Langley Writers (blog)
Original item by Katie Sheila Haigh
John,
About`effs.
The `effs in your stuff always have a smile on their faces (particularly when it`s an `effin smile. And are always straight and humorously to the `effin point...keep `em comin`
Like this
Poor Larkin! - the man was out of luck
His life a sheer catastrophe
If he never even had a fuck
Till after nineteen sixty three
(I`m not annoyed at all the pointless and humourless stuff...just bored.)
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
Thank you very much for the comments; they were much appreciated.
Comment is about This Crested King (blog)
Original item by Starfish
The words "cruel" and "cruelty" are Man's alone, since nature seems not to differentiate in the behaviour of its own. It just IS. We can only act we we see fit in various circumstances...or situations...and these provide the material for endless discourse, some pretty heated. And that it, perhaps, how it should be as Man seeks a place in the wider world of life and survival,
influenced and dictated by his increasing knowledge of world (and what lies beyond) and self.
Comment is about NATURE'S BLUE-PRINT (or putting the fox among chickens) (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
If there's a test to apply to our manner of living,
It's perhaps that our taking was less than our giving.
(I too am in my 70th year - and recent Health
MoTs give reason to hope for a few more years
yet!!)
Comment is about Brightening Rings (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
I was really delighted to see you both at the Tudor Harry. I'm sorry you had such difficulty getting there - and hope the return journey wasn't as bad. I heard that the M6 was shut later and we all wondered whether you were affected.
I'm glad you enjoyed yourselves. I hope to see you again soon, if not in Wigan, on the Wirral - I'm feeling more enthused about my poetry at the moment, which always makes me feel like travelling! Give my love to Yvonne xx
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
I remember it well - and it was sickening how soon the news turned to financial gain - you are our historic 'writer' of wrongs Harry - I enjoyed this.
Comment is about Priorities (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
I'd never have you down as an 'effer 'n' jeffer', H. I do a bit myself, although I would like to think that it wasn't gratuitous but served a literary point (as indeed your last stanza does).
Comment is about Priorities (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
I agree about that last stanza I think it would `strut` more if the lines were shorter.
(I like the possibilities of the `fowl thrall`Is this boss guy captive and henpecked by a bevy of less than beautiful ladies?) Neat though.
Comment is about This Crested King (blog)
Original item by Starfish
Isobel,
Thanks for the welcome last night. enjoyed
seeing lots of the folks from the photos...and lovely to meet your mum and sister,
Love from me and Yvonne.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Another vanished post back on...for those who remember (some hope!) stanzas six and seven have been heavily revised... the excremental language is making a definite point)
Comment is about Priorities (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Hi P&S - hope you are well. :) Amusing tale follows. Back in the 70's my late wife Marion became vegetarian after seeing the many cattle trucks heading down the A2 to Dover - there had been a lot of bad press about their treatment in Europe. But during our usual Saturday shop we stopped for elevenses in a cafe and never even thought before ordering and consuming bacon rolls. Later the penny dropped and a red faced spouse decided we wouldn't visit that cafe again as the tempting aroma would always be there... ;) ATB, Dave
Comment is about Hell From Leather (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Hello there!
So glad to see you posting again :-D
Love some of these combos - flax flow, torn free, mind tick, ever more
I should give it a go...
Comment is about Four ( June exercise ) (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
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Fri 14th Jun 2013 18:09
great profile painting Cynthia
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
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Fri 14th Jun 2013 18:05
thank you very much Cynthia and Rachel.
Comment is about 3 miles of moss (blog)
Alexzandra - I think it is commonly accepted that all dogs are descended from the wolf...
hunters all. Whilst usually known to hunt in
packs, they still run on "survival of the fittest" mode and the first to catch the prey will deal the killing bite. The rest merely
join in as packs do. You raise an interesting
point about the connection between eating and
chasing a prey. Do they employ this tactic
at greyhound races? Time and again the "top dog" grabs("kills") the prey when it must know it's NOT edible...yet still it does it. If
only dogs could talk!!
Comment is about NATURE'S BLUE-PRINT (or putting the fox among chickens) (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
pleasured lick on labial curve
twisting vowels in bowels
that tongue speaks in so many languages.
Comment is about Isadora Vibes (poet profile)
Original item by Isadora Vibes
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Fri 14th Jun 2013 15:34
The rhyme flows as smooth as silk in your write, I enjoyed reading each line. :)
Comment is about How Absurd (blog)
Original item by Starfish
thank you alex...have a read of stella jones and marianne both brilliant x
Comment is about white noise (letters) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
i like a poem with numbers in it :) nice.
Comment is about 3 miles of moss (blog)
This is evocative. It teases the mind of the reader by vividly creating a strong dream-state-like mood and then leaving open what is going on. Swimming endlessly through golden lily pads is especially intriguing.
Comment is about The Bath (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
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Fri 14th Jun 2013 14:30
If only we had'nt been introduced
to carnivorousness eh Dave.
A tasty morsel of a poem.
Patricia and Stef.xx
Comment is about Hell From Leather (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Thank you Cynthia for your kind and thoughtful comments. I've no idea whether I'm going through a phase of writing better stuff - that's for others to say - but, if I am, it's not to do with workshops because I don't attend. Hope to run into you one day.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
This is a superb poem, with an outstanding two-line opener, punchy insight and well- turned diction. 'an oasis of delicious chaos' - delicious writing. I think it is the best of yours I have recently read - all of which are really good. These days, I find an 'edge' to your work which I didn't notice before. Which may have been my carelessness.
I do think 'you' can be 'pleased for them'. It is a generosity of character.
Comment is about The Introvert (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
The opening seven lines are superb, a poem in themselves. Like the others, I find more than one poem emerging from the whole, all similar in theme. Perhaps stanza breaks would be a neat solution since you do make some sharp turns.
Comment is about 52 Hertz (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
You cover a wide scale of 'types' of men who hit women. Not every 'type' given is rolled into any one man; that would make identification much easier. It's a good poem, well written, and on a very potent theme.
Comment is about Men Who Hit Women (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
BTW, thanks for reading 'The Bath'. You were spot on. I felt a bit terrified as I wrote it - with the suicide inference, of course, but also with the realization of a society and/or a personal schedule/angst that allows a person to become that emptied. When do we take control?
Comment is about Joshua Van-Cook (poet profile)
Original item by Joshua Van-Cook
So good to see you back. I didn't get to this poem until this morning after I posted my latest blog. Can't believe it is sort of similar in theme.
Anyway, this is a great idea, always worth exploring from a personal angle. IMO, the poem is still a bit too raw, too 'wordy'. I know your work, and I really like it. I think this piece just needs some sensitive discipline: eg. 'rushes' is surely 'fast'; so ' the cityscape rushes into view' sounds better and expresses clearly, I think, just what you intended. That's what I mean, in general. Have another look and see if my comment bears any weight. My suggestions are never a critique.
Comment is about The City (blog)
Original item by Joshua Van-Cook
Hi,
I did intend to do this sooner but totally forgot. I just wanted to say a quick 'thank you' for your comment recently. Glad you liked it :-) Kath
Comment is about Richard Alfred (poet profile)
Original item by Richard Alfred
I can buy into nearly all of this, Marksy. But "wasted wanks"? I don't understand the concept!
Comment is about Living Life on the Ledge (blog)
Original item by Marksy
The "sophistication" of Man indeed has a fragile and thin veneer. We don't have to scratch hard the pages of history to discover a less "civilised" side to the human character. Nazi Germany was a little too far back for most of this site's readers but most of us will recall Bosnia, Rwanda, the Kurds in Iraq, Cambodia.
I'm not sure if I'm agreeing or disagreeing with you, MC, but you've certainly provided food for thought.
Comment is about NATURE'S BLUE-PRINT (or putting the fox among chickens) (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Francine
Mon 17th Jun 2013 20:50
Yes, the contrast of images... always thought provoking!
Comment is about Spring. (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger