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tony sheridan

Wed 20th Feb 2013 19:56

Love this! I relate to it. Great punchline! Take care, Tony.

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John Coopey

Wed 20th Feb 2013 18:20

Grandstand in black and white featuring vintage cars being driven up a muddy hillclimb by a husband and wife team in victorian costume. She would sit and bounce on the bonnet for extra purchase. Meanwhile, on itv, wrestling with jackie pallo, mick mcmanus and billy two-rivers. They don't know they're born.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 20th Feb 2013 15:51

I think the rental for our TV was 7/6d - less than 50p - per week. Ah...those halcyon days when "Grandstand" was in B/W and snooker wasn't featured!

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John Coopey

Wed 20th Feb 2013 15:17

Julian, they don't know they're born! Why, in my day...

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Isobel

Wed 20th Feb 2013 14:13

Looking every bit the French Lieutenant's woman, Yvonne Brunton returns to our shores as a visible poet!

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Julian (Admin)

Wed 20th Feb 2013 12:02

Really good this, Dave. Excellent in fact.

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Julian (Admin)

Wed 20th Feb 2013 12:00

Which came first, Dave, the wheelbarrow or the Williams which, as we all know, is a formula one racing Carlos. And, who is the wheel nut here?

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Anthony Emmerson

Wed 20th Feb 2013 11:56

If WriteOutLoud is the "high street" of the poetry world, to continue the precious stones analogy, I am the "Ratners." Not even worth the insult of a brick through the window . . . boo-hoo . . .

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Julian (Admin)

Wed 20th Feb 2013 11:54

You had Stilton? Luxury!
All we got was Fanny and Johnny. Note to our younger viewers: I am not making this up.

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Julian (Admin)

Wed 20th Feb 2013 11:49

Hey Anthony, you are so wrong. You are a diamond geezer, a cut above the rest. It is out of respect for your oeuvre that your work has been left alone. Trust me, I know of what I speak. I have been making this sort of stuff up for years.
A. N. Twerp

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Anthony Emmerson

Wed 20th Feb 2013 10:53

I sit here now, after reading this, sobbing into my tepid coffee and contemplating whether my life is worth living. Plagiarists avoid my work (like the plague) and no one thinks my profile is worth stealing. Goodbye cruel WOL . . .

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John Coopey

Wed 20th Feb 2013 09:47

Our neighbours had an original pay-per-view set. You put a shilling in a slot and it gave you an hour or so of telly. Forward thinking or what? This predated Sentanta, ESPN and Sky by half a century!
I think these should be re-introduced to see how the viewing figures for cookery, house renovation, holiday, celebrity, and "talent" programmes would stand up if you were spending money on them directly.

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Fkx

Wed 20th Feb 2013 08:20

Haiku is good, whatever season. Thanks for sharing!

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Fkx

Wed 20th Feb 2013 08:17

Sweeping verse and amazing visual. Is that one of your photographs? Loved the composition of it, the receding triangles is like the golden mean projecting into the horizon, layer by layer. Thanks for sharing.

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Andy N

Wed 20th Feb 2013 08:11

lovely stuff, tracy. both me and cathy really like this - one of both of our favourites of yours so far. very skillfully told. be proud of yourself here as it is very good stuff.

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Andy N

Wed 20th Feb 2013 08:09

really enjoyed this, Jamie although i am wondering whether you need both the second and third stanza as removing one may sharpen it's impact even more but good stuff either way, m8

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Andy N

Wed 20th Feb 2013 08:08

good structure here, John is dead right with this. Clearly a skill here at work with this piece. good stuff, m8

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Ray Miller

Tue 19th Feb 2013 22:19

And you ask why I don't live here?
Honey, how come you don't leave?!

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Dave Carr

Tue 19th Feb 2013 22:08

Once of a day you could warm up your stilton in the back of a telly. Ahh me!

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Dave Carr

Tue 19th Feb 2013 21:54

I think a wing nut is most appropriate here. It has to be a little nut to emphasize its importance but a little white nut? You'd be thinking Tommy Steele.
I added a chicken. Some people are hard to please! :-)

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Kenneth Eaton-Dykes

Tue 19th Feb 2013 21:43

Hi Ian.

Great poem, I particularly liked the second verse.

Keep 'em coming. KED.

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John Coopey

Tue 19th Feb 2013 20:38

Whoa, Ian!
This made an impact on first reading through its imagery and iambic pentameter.
But it made an even bigger impact second time round as I anticipated the ending and the images dropped into a better understood context.
I suspect you know what you are doing.
I think you will like the work of Ian Gant and Thomas Thurman on this site.
Keep posting

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tony sheridan

Tue 19th Feb 2013 19:05

Love this. Take care, Tony.

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tony sheridan

Tue 19th Feb 2013 19:02

Great poem! After a walk in the countryside I often get pen and paper! Take care, Tony.

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Shirley Smothers

Tue 19th Feb 2013 18:32

Hello Nigel,
Thank you for your poem/comment on my short story "The Emergency Room Visit."
I like your poetry. Good writing.

Thanks
Shirley

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Shirley Smothers

Tue 19th Feb 2013 18:30

Hi MC
Thank you for your comments on my short story, "The Emergency Room Visit". This story needs work but I like it.

Thanks
Shirley

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 19th Feb 2013 16:47

Hi Dave :o) I think you have hit it spot on. I wanted to evoke a feeling of regret and in-consequence. The brief emotion when finding a lovers note between the pages of a seldom read book.
Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 19th Feb 2013 16:45

Hi Dave :o) I think you have hit it spot on. I wanted to evoke a feeling of regret and in-consequence. The brief emotion when finding a lovers note between the pages of a rarely read book.
Tommy

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John Aikman

Tue 19th Feb 2013 16:43

Tommy, you don't need to 'impress the reader', they are already impressed!

: )

Jx

PS and I still don't think the lines need an extra syllable, they work fine without it when I speak them out loud.

Love your stuff!

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 19th Feb 2013 16:36

Hi John :o) You raise an interesting point re the 'it' in the first two stanzas. The placement and inclusion of 'it' is to impress the reader of the stress of the lines and by its use causes the line to flow more rhythmically. I appreciate you raising the point.
Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 19th Feb 2013 16:35

Hi John :o) You raise an interesting point re the 'it' in the first two stanzas. The placement and inclusion of 'it' is to impress the reader of the stress of the lines and by its use causes the line to flow more rhythmically. I appreciate you raising the point.
Tommy

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jean lucy thompson

Tue 19th Feb 2013 16:10

Thanx everyone So kind :)

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Nigel Astell

Tue 19th Feb 2013 15:37

Time stops as
the leaf falls.

Wild grass stirs
a dog sniffs.

Fucking nettles sting
forever it seemed.

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Isobel

Tue 19th Feb 2013 15:18

This is the one I've already flagged up to you Julian. At the moment that link is only working if you have an admin password.

As far as I know, it is being looked into by our technical people. It definitely hasn't been deleted - it's just invisible for now!

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Julian (Admin)

Tue 19th Feb 2013 15:01

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Julian (Admin)

Tue 19th Feb 2013 14:58

Glad it went well guys. keep the reviews coming!

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winston plowes

Tue 19th Feb 2013 14:21

Hi Ann. Thx for the comments. In this case it felt right to use the lines unaltered. I was suprised how much of a flow was achievable using over 70% of first lines from recent blogs which should be about entirely ramdom subjects.

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 19th Feb 2013 14:17

You have a fresh voice!

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 19th Feb 2013 14:14

I like this because it's different. It appeals to me!

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 19th Feb 2013 13:21

JC - I have tried to locate Yvonne B. by clicking on her name when locating comment by
her - and also by searching under her name. In
both instances, there was no sight of any PROFILE PAGE or place where I could see I was able to leave a message.
I hope you can resolve this with Isobel - apropos my previous comment about my own problem with "permissions". ALSO - does YB
HAVE a profile page - as seen in yours and mine?
If not, has this been deleted and does she know? As I said before...weird!!
Cheers.

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 19th Feb 2013 13:03

JC - as a matter of interest, I have been in
touch with Isobel (moderator on WOL) about having that "permissions" issue with another
site (from a post on I tried to read from 13/2/2013 - "All Grown Up"). In that instance, she said the user profile had been
deleted and that the post in question had
hung around for whatever reason and should go in due course. Weird!
I will pass your message to Yvonne and hope
I don't get a repeat of the problem myself when
doing so.

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 19th Feb 2013 12:36

Nothing flaky about this bowl of fun!

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imprisonedbeauty

Tue 19th Feb 2013 11:12

Haha! You should write a poem about the kite Ray :)

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John Aikman

Tue 19th Feb 2013 10:15

Neat, although I don't think it needs the 'it' in the first line of the first two verses. They just seems superfluous to me. I mean, what else would you be referring to other than the wind or the sun?

Lovely little poem, though.

Just a thought.

: )

Jx

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Dave Bradley

Tue 19th Feb 2013 08:16

Only just found this. It captures a kind of wistfulness amid impermanence very well.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 19th Feb 2013 08:06

Provocative. It's certainly less difficult, but still not always easy. Even harder if trans.

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tracey bucknell

Tue 19th Feb 2013 05:36

it can be tony :) thank you for reading it :)
take care too :)

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tracey bucknell

Tue 19th Feb 2013 05:33

thank you tony , i'm glad you enjoyed it :)

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Carla Tombacco

Mon 18th Feb 2013 23:00

Hi Cynthia, thanks for your comment. As a matter of fact this text on memories and oblivion is very recent and I'm going to work on it, trying to improve some lines, if I can... Maybe it results a little experimental and bizarre at the first readings. Or maybe it simply sucks :-)! Yet the "sprung" effects as well as the enjambements are intentional. I often use (also in Italian) lexical or semantic deviation as poetic licence (the "foregrounded figure" with the language on the background), verbs normally not related to a subject or an objet (like "listen to a gesture" "the seat of the point of view" or similar) and so on. But I' m not a native speaker of English, though I love this language, so your advice is always very precious to me. I agree with you, originality is important. Everybody should tell his or her own soul and not someone else's.

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Deborah Jordan Bailey

Mon 18th Feb 2013 22:41

thanks Dave :)

and thanks Cynthia.. it was just my line of thinking, pessimistic maybe, trying to be stoical if what seemed to be something turned out not to be or just changed along the way.Like some journeys turn out when you're not sure where you're going anyway,could go one way, could go the other,or yep both roads could well merge into one. Guilty of B&W thinking again,me.

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